Unwanted In Wonderland - Comments

I really like this story. It is amazing :)

I'm in love with this story.

I'm rooting for Zacky and Giselle, so hardcore.
If they don't get together soon, I may cry or scream or both.
Probably both.

You are a fantastic writer.
Like, seriously.
I'm always majorly impressed by you.

Keep up the amazing job.
<3

Awwww Zack's gonna fuck up bad and realise his mistake I bet
I mean, he's becoming loggerheads with Brian so :S

Ahem

Okay, first up for me to discuss:

Gisselle's outfit, the boys and Matt

I loved the way the boys reacted to her outfit. Especially Brian.. that was so funny. He was so caught, but he'd never admit it of course. He's too cool for that = p Johnny.. I love that man. He's a serious contender for being one of my favourite characters in your masterpiece. His whole reaction to her and the way he was at the club with her so great. I'd love to do some dirty dancing with that man... oh and this is my absolute fav:

“Hey, be careful with him. Johnny has this weird talent of sneaking into girls pants with his retarded antics.” Matt warned with a laugh.

He can sneak into my pants any day....
Matt. God. He's such and idiot! He called her Gabrielle. I can't believe that. If I was Val.. or any of those girls.. I would've ripped shreds in him for that. Regardless of whether it was an accident or not. It's still fucked up. Then the dickhead goes and accuses her of being pregnant? God, his mouth really isnt attached to his brain, is it? Though I found it amusing he was all ready to go kill "houstan"...

Second topic:

Zacky & Gisselle

The scene with them at the club was quite amusing. You could tell he was trying so hard to continue to be pissed with her, but he was faking it. He loves that girl too much to stay mad at her for any length of time. And he quite clearly loves that her ass and tits have "grown" a lil. Of course he does = p

YES! FINALLY! Some action... = p Although the blow job wasn't exactly romantic.. it was still hot as hell and totally worth the wait. hahaha. But.. it sucks that he got off and she was still left frustrated. Where's the fairness in that? Damn male. He went that far.. the least he could've done was finish her off. hahahaha.

Their discussion at the end... even after reading it three times, it still makes my heart ache and my eyes to well up. I understand his reasoning, I really do... but it's not fair. He can't have his cake and eat too. Obviously he couldnt stand watching her be with someone else, yet he expects her to stand by and watch him date someone else? Fuck that. Double standards don't go down well with me at all. I agree with sugapie63... whoever said they'd break up? Maybe their relationship would be the one that stuck.. that lasted. They'd be the ones to grow old together... sitting on his front porch, getting whacked out of their minds and discussing past presidents for life!!

On a final note, I apologize to the readers for not noticing the chapter cut off when I posted it. My bad! Glad you noticed and fixed it = p

I'm so excited! I get to read the next chapter now!! =)

Damn...you're good.
I just watched Alice in Wonderland yesterday and it made me think about this story, so I'm sure I don't have to tell you how excited I was to find out it had been updated.
But geesh, Zacky is so frickin frustrating. And a huge asshole. A huge, frustrating asshole if you will. I understand in a lot of ways what he meant in his little speech at the end, but he fails to realize that he won't necessarily hurt her and they don't have to break up. Case in point? Matt and Val, obviously. But he's a man so he wouldn't catch on to that. And as much as I would love them to be together now, that would just end the story faster and I sure as hell don't want that. Ok, ramble over. Oh and another thing. She should just fuck Johnny and get it over with. It would be fun, and it would let Zack realize that he can't have it both ways... or maybe Dallas...she could do Dallas too...ok ramble really over now, you know better than me anyway. Haha. I hope you get well soon, and not just so you can update the story. I got food poisoning the day before I graduated highschool and it fuckin sucked... Anyway, I hope you feel better and I'm running out of good adjectives to describe your work, but this week I think I'll use magnificent. So magnificent work as usual, and I'll be looking forward to the next update! <33

OH. MY. GOD.

This story is absolutely amazing, like I can't even begin to tell you how much I truly love it.

This is the kind of story I've been waiting on for quite awhile and now I've finally found an actually interesting story!

Oh my sweet Jesus in Heaven above! You actually made me cry like more than three or four times reading this story!

It's just absolutely stunning, but these last couple of chapters, wow! Ugh! I just, especially the one where he admitted how he couldn't be with her. I cried, oh my God I cried, is that pathetic? lol...

And you made it so freakin' humorous I laughed until it hurt! I loved the pranks they played on Gena and I loved how Johnny always had a camera in hand, especially when she was singing, "Your Body Is A Wonderland" to Jimmy! That was classic! I also couldn't help but crack when reading the part where you priced the cost of the bed, the sheets, and something else(?) and then said something about making your best friends girl friend think your doing the nasty = Priceless....For everything else there's a mastercard!

Oh my God I loved that! That was genius!

But I really hope things work out between G. and Z. They'd make such a cute freakin' couple!

Can't wait for the updates hon! I'm totally gonna send you a friend request. Your an amazing writer, that's inspired my amazing personality, and I love to make new friends, especially with talent and amazing personality! :D

I'll be back to comment soon!

Vengeance Mistress~

lols.
i think what zacky says make sense. :D

<3!

Oh wow...
That's just... sad.
but it was an awesome end of chapter ^^"
I really can't wait to see how this will turn out!
:)

OH MY GOD!!! This update was the best EVER! Idk what Zacky says id he doesn’t end up with her I will cry and be very pissed with you... seriously this story is publish worthy! I can’t wait for the next update! I really want to know what happens!!! Update soon please! *puts on best puppy dog face* :D

You rock, please write more.
You're an exquisite writer.
So... does Zacky eventually give in?
Does Dallas make a come back and he ends up with Gisselle for good?
Does Dallas actually turn out to be a jerk like the guys said?
Will Gisselle end up with Johnny if not Zacky?
Millions of questions, so few answers...
xD
But we love you anyways!

My god! FREAKING GREAT! The only way to describe your story! Truthfully, I am in love with this story and I always get so happy when i find out there is a new chapter! It's little bit sad but i don't care. Please post more!

sooo I love you!
can i have your unborn babies?
lmao
this story is so damn amazing!

Wow, I love it. It might not be the ending but I feel like it could be one.

Im a girl who likes sad endings, why? They seem so much real. I loved it.

At the beginning I hoped that Zack would be for her you know? but right now Im not so sure if I would like that.
By the way your writing=awesome!!!

she needs to leave.
that is to say
she needs to cut herself off completely from zacky

no,
she just needs to break his heart till there's nothing but a few particles of it's dust left behind!!!

Oh that made me cry.
Poor Gisselle. Awwwh!

I hope you feel better soon.

This chapter was really sad :(
Buuuut, I hope you get better soon and I hope we get an other update soon ^______^

awwwww i think i nearly cried abit =[
the end bit was so sad i just want to cuddle them lol =]]]]=]=]=]

Omg poor Gisselle =[
Has Zack ever thought that if they did get together, they may not break up?
:(
I think he's just hurt Gisselle a lot worse tbh, as now she has to concede with the fact he knows she loves him, she knows he loves her and nothing will ever come of it
>.<
It's almost like she's been relegated to loneliness whilst Zack can still have everything he wants
Why can't Zack not be selfish and let Gisselle have something?
He's so against her being in a relationship or being sexually affectionate with others yet he won't give her what she wants
*not happy with Zack*
>.< lol

Thanks for the update and I hope you feel better soon!
Let me tell you that was extremely HOT!!!
Johnny boy is such a flirt! I really iike this story!
Thanks for the update!!!

Bad Matt for slipping up like that "/
There is something about Gisselle not being able to figure Brian out that has me really curious about him. Jimmy is so funny and awesome, Johnny is just adorable. Zack...goodness Zack needs to get his head out of his ass.
Amazing, fantastic, brilliant update. Your writing is ace.