Frozen Water - Comments

Tehe .. Sorry, it took me sooo loooong to comment >_> I'm a lazy bum. As you know.

Anywaaaaay! - I really like chapter three, it worked well and had a good ... Hhmm, whats the word .. Ooo! .... Aura, when reading it.

Well, I thought it did.

^_^

xxx

Just wanted to say I really like your story!

It drags you in; I felt like I was standing next to Alex by the lake.

Update when you can :D

Like awesome:mrgreen:

herrow!

hehe thats is no problem M'lady.

Love the update!

It describes it well, and I could see what was happening like a movie clip.

Can't wait to read what happens next.

Oh!

But before I go, just want to add that errmm....

dam it -_-''

Lost what I was gonna say...

Ack!

Never mind!

Talk to you soon.

Luv ya xx

Gemy xxxxXxxx

DARN YEAH JUST SAWWW THAT. THANX GEMMMMMAAAAA!!!!!! my grammar sucks ass

Hey Hun!

I really like the new idea for your new story. And I can't wait to read more.

Now, your gonna hate me for this but a peice of text you might wanna re-write (it's something very very simple) but the sentance doesn't make sense to me...kay?

Here we go :

1, On this paragraphy the sentance which is underlined doesn't make sense...or is it just me reading it wrong :

"You shouldn't say that. 'love' is merely a figure of speech. A useless and regretted emotion." his cold, harsh tone was like a bullet to the head. We could be have been demolotion lovers with each expression and word portrayed in a protrait of melenchalony and darkness.

With the section that has been placed in bold, could you remove the 'be' and then it's corrected?

Just something you might like to do....

hehe ^_^

ANWAY...

I love the idea for the story and the prelude was very intresting...I wanna meet this guy (I'm am only guessing that this mysterious person is a man) and find out more about him. (or her?)

More?!?

Luv ya!

Gemy xxxx