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That was unexpected. Now I'm really curious to see what's next!!!

Until then! :)

Didnt see that coming. At all. Wheres snuffles at though! I miss him!

I really like this story. Poor Gramps is killed off now :( I hope she will be okay. So young too.

This story is really amazing and I love it!! You do such a fantastic job writing it!! I can't wait for a new chapter!!! XD

Time for another episode of...what mistakes did nit-picking Amanda find...?

End of 3rd paragraph:

“That corpus might look like him but it wasn’t him.”

---corpus? You mean corpse.

4th paragraph:

“It was impossible becasue my Gramps was never sick.”
---’because’. just a typo here. XD

“…and even my chicken poxes didn’t faze him.”
---I think just chicken pox is fine, you don’t need the ‘es’ on the end of ‘pox’.

“He makes me go for a run with him ever afternoon…”
---forgot the ‘y’ on ‘every’

5th paragraph:

“My heart sank as my eyes landed on it's face…”
---I might have missed it before, but “it’s” isn’t the right one in this case. It should be ‘its’, without the apostrophe. The possessive apostrophe-s combination doesn’t work for the word it (don’t ask me why, ask English teachers!!! XD)

6th paragraph:

‘"What are you doing in her?”’
---forgot the ‘e’ on “here”.

2nd paragraph above the first break (lost count…lol)

“I wrapped my arms around the corpus that was once my godfather and wished with all my heart that it were alive.”
---again, corpus? Again, should be corpse. A ‘corpus’ is a body…but a body of writing. Not a dead body. XD

Okay. That's all. Sections 2 and 3 were mistake-free to my slightly searching gaze! :)

My thoughts - I can't say I didn't see it coming, since I'd already read it once, but I do think you did a better job portraying it this time. I can't wait to see how you pull everything else together from here, but I know it's going to be worth reading :)

And as for the next chapter of Fairytale...? Can't wait! :)

Love your stories. :)

Gramps? Nooooooooooo!!!!

Good chapter though...

Noooooo!
Not Gramps D'=
Hehe thanks for adding an extra chapter, it really helped ^.^ (bipolar moment much? lmfao xD)
Oh man, I wonder what will happen :(
Amazing chapter :D
Can't wait for the next one :)

Okay, so I have a few nit-pickings...lol. Nothing too big, I just decided to be a bit...yeah. Picky? Idk. :)

Paragraph one:

"Looking back I sure wish I had though more of it than maybe I would have done something to change it."

--I would put, "Looking back, I sure wish I had thought more of it. Maybe then I would have done something to change it."

Paragraph two: (after "Happy 13th birthday...")

"I'm no early bird nor have I ever wanted to be, there was something about sleeping in that was just so...refreshing."

--If it were me, I would have worded it as such: "I'm no early bird, nor have I ever wanted to be one. There was something about sleeping in that was just so...refreshing."

Paragraph Three:

"As soon as the balls of my feet touched the cold woody surface with a loud 'thump' I swiftly took Gramps's brittle hands in mine and started to dance to my own humming, my bare feet brushing across every corner of the room."
--how 'bout: "As soon as the balls of my feet touched the cold, wooden surface with a loud 'thump', I swiftly took Gramps's brittle hands in mine and started to dance to my own humming, my bare feet brushing across every corner of the room." --just to add a few commas and change "woody" to "wooden" :)
Paragraph seven:
"Giggling I washed my hair with shampoo enjoying the wonderful fresh clean smell. After I had taken a quick shower that involved me singing tunelessly at the top of my lungs I skipped to my godfather's room looking glamorous in my bright birthday sundress with only the thought of breakfast on my mind."
--"Giggling, I washed my hair with shampoo, enjoying the wonderfully fresh and clean smell. After I had taken a quick shower, which involved me singing tunelessly at the top of my lungs, I skipped to my godfather's room, looking glamorous in my bright birthday sundress with only the thought of breakfast on my mind." --in my version, I added commas and changed the wording slightly. It makes it flow easier as I read it...
Paragraph nine:
"That's why when I opened the door to see my godfather dressed in his traveling robe and clutching my deep blue one in his hand instead of a frying pan I froze."
--I would just add a comma between "why" and "when", and also before "I froze". :)

Anywho, other than those, I loved the update. I didn't "Love" that her gramps is possibly (probably) dying. Loooooooove it otherwise. Can't wait for more! :)

Soooo, Sirius is her dad?
Great chapter by the way!
Can't wait for the next one :D

Aw... I love this chapter! I can't wait for more!

I am officially in love with this story, I can not wait for your next update ! :)

Great update! That's pretty changed from the original, but I like it better. Keep up the good work, yeah? Can't wait!

I'm loving this, I really hope you update this soon!! :)

I love the update! Snuffles, huh? ;)

So...
Does this story take place in the third Harry Potter book?
How old is she?
I am soo confused because this is my first time reading this story and I have only noticed a couple of things:
1)That Voldemort is after her
2) And that she has some special power
Great chapter by the way!
Can't wait for the next one :D

Okay, so same as my comment from the sixth, where it should have been "object" you put "abject" again. Talking about going to Hogwarts.

There might have been another, but I can't remember where the mistake was or even what it was.

Good chapter, can't wait for more!

Great chapter!!!
I wonder who that dog is ;D

This story is so intriguing! I love it! I can't wait for more!

I still love this :) Good job!

Sorry for not leaving a longer comment - I'm a wee bit distracted :)

Relief - the emotion I felt when you said there wasn't going to be a fling. I think that would have been just a wee bit weird.

Anywho, I have one thing to say: in the fourth paragraph, as she opened her mouth to "abject" it should be "object".

that's the only thing I saw wrong, but I wasn't really watching closely.

Anywho, I love this story. A lot. And can't wait to see where you're headed after this :)