I Accidently Kidnapped the Joker. Crap. - Comments

You are awesome. I love the story!!

i would love to read a sequel

Dude i friggin love this story! i couldnt stop laughing at some parts, and i couldnt stop smiling the entire time!

Thank you everyone, it means so much to me that you took the time to read my story and actually made the effort to comment on it! I will be working on a sequel (: The first chapter is done, but I am waiting til I have more chapters written to post the story itself. So thanks again, and you future readers, along with myself(and I do), should thank Macabre Shadow for being so patient and kind for pointing out the mistakes. I have just re-edited it and it should be better. If any other mistakes are found just tell me and I'll be happy to fix them. You people are beyond awesome!

i liked it

u should really do a sequel

Chapter 10
SpongeBob is so awesome! I’ll keep in mind that if I ever become a murderous Sysco path, I’ll watch SpongeBob to keep me happy. From seeing others suffers- Should be suffer (right after the SpongeBob part (I’m tired of counting paragraphs)). The ending was soooo good! And if your reading my post and haven’t read the AWSOME story that Poison. Inke wrote, I caution you that there will be a spoiler, most likely in the next sentence. So seriously stop reading it. I thought the last line was great! PLEASE WRITE A SEQUAL!!!!!! Your story was AMAZING and you shouldn’t give up on this it( I hate cliff-hangers)! In the next story, you should have the joker break her out, or since she’s so smart, she could break herself out. Either way, I’m sure it will be great. Pleasure working with you!
-Macabre Shadow

Chapter 9
I liked the philosophy that the second paragraph gave. In the sentence: Then when I started to get older, guys started to see my as this weird book worm who thought she was too good for them but that wasn’t the case. (paragraph 14) “my” should be “me”. I think my favorite line so far is: “Wait what the hell are you shocked about, the man busted out of Arkham 23 times for Pete’s sake”. The ending to this chapter really makes me want to read the last part!

Chapter 8
Never mind about my earlier comment about the gun. But it seems that he would easily be able to disarm her, especially while she was bending over. If I was the joker, I would DEFENENTLY kill her for threatening me with a gun. The joker is smart. He would have realized that the girl was hesitant, and would never fire the gun, out of fear of being heard. The reading was not difficult, and I didn’t notice any mistakes.

Chapter 7
First of all, I think you chose a perfect time to put it back to the Joker’s point of view. Wait, wouldn’t she find his knife when she went through his cloths? He would be mad, not afraid when he saw his make-up gone. And where in the heck did she get a Magnum?? You should mention something about it earlier in the story.

Chapter 6
Again, I like the good imagination. I couldn’t find many mistakes, but I would be very happy if you fixed, or considered fixing the mistakes I have pointed out. I know how hard it is to find the time to fix mistakes, because you would have to read through your writing at least five times in order to find them all. By the way, I though and example of some great detail was “This is just false flesh that haunts my every thought.”

Chapter 5
Ok, so I’m just going to do this quickly. I’m just going to copy, paste how (I think) the sentences should be written: The Joker still lay motionless on my new brown carpet as I considered where to put him. (Paragraph 1) I like the Marilyn Mason part by the way. I also like how you keep the swearing to a minimum. When I finally think about the state he was in, I’m pretty sure he would be dead or at least close to dead by now.

Chapter 4
Nice comment on Lindsey Lohan! I completely agree! I have finally found a mistake! You shouldn’t have a quotation (“) after dead in the first paragraph. Also, the Joker is not “fat”. He is heavy (paragraph 3). The bag was slumped in the corner, not the bad (paragraph 6). “’Hey Tom, would you mind helping me out this in my place?’” is an awkward sentence. Finally, Tom should ask her if she wants to wash the scrubs, not watch the scrubs.

Chapter 3
That was great! I loved how you gave the Joker's point of view! It's almost like a comic relief. You captured the attitude of the Joker quite well. This is getting very annoying for me, because I am finding it very hard to find something worth criticizing in your story. = )

Chapter 2
Ok, never mind about what I said about adding more about her pannic. You described that more to my liking in this chapter. I'm not going to write as much as I did last time, because I want to get back to the story, but I think that you captered her feelings and pannic quite well.

Chapter 1 review
Ok, I am going to tell you what I think of the story chapter by chapter. First of all, this is one of the first stories I have read on here where the author can actually write; good job with the vocab. and creativity by the way. I like how it gets right into the story, and I like the different perspective she gives the readers. I also thought it was great how you didn't waste time giving a second by second review of how exactly you hit him.
The only thing I didn't like was why she took the body. You should add more about how in her panic, she took him, or she didn't know what else to do. Other than that, great so far!

Hmmm, sequel sounds nice. XP

please write the sequel to this story!

i love to the sequel of this story

I think this story was really awesome!:D

I never even thanked you all for commenting and I feel bad about it. Soo thank you :) And I guess I shouldn't make you guys wait two days for an update so I'll do one update everyday maybe even two at a time. Until next time all