The Littlest Way. - Comments

Regarding your request:

I didn't get to check out your story per se, because I am incredibly busy, but from what I saw....

(for example)

"Here it is." Adam replied, handing me the paper.

It should be

"Here it is," Adam replied...

You don't have to make it a period every time you use dialog.

And the prologue, you have to use proper spacing, as you did in the later chaps.

I'll give it a more in depth review later, but au revoir for now. :)

AHHH!!! I LOVED IT!!

like this much!!

**holds arms so far apart that one falls off**

Woo I was in there! Woo that chapter was deicated to me!

**feels special**

I love you loadsims!!

Hahaha.
Well Mikes is always innocent.
So I needed it to be someone you'd never guess.

to tell you one thing, story is really good and interesting. great way to tell a story, i almost got feeling how she's really there sitting and talking. great.
but comas, are you in fight with them? there are like dozens of sentences that took me ages to get the point (i did eventualy). you should use more comas. fullstops and question marks and staff are great but you really don't like comas, do you?
i don't mean to be harsh, i like the story and that elena, what a bitch but i will never forgive you for making mikey a bad guy, never. lol
no i mean it, story is great and really casualy written which i love but comas...use them.

LOVES IT MORE SOON PLZ!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

there are only two things i can nag about, which is great!

A. some of your grammar is off; you're missing commas in some places, and you have the wrong tenses in others. It can be kind of distracting. For this i would suggest getting someone to read the chapter before you post it so they can catch all the mistakes.

B. it's a little jumpy in places. One paragraph needs to be about one thing, and another about another thing. There were some times when one of your paragraphs had so many extra things in it that i had to skip over it.

but it's an interesting plot and i cant wait for more.

I'm working on it.
Rachel I love you.
You made my day.
I am working on an update, but I need some help from the readers.
Can you guys find me famous band matthews.
I only have 3.
Matt Devine
Matt Good.
Matt Rubano.
I need more choices for Leslie's boyfriend.
Then we will have a poll to discuss it.

Rachel Wanty Moresims!!... If I have to handcuff ou to a keyboard I WILL! update soonish?

This is really good. I like it.

Team Timelord:

The storyline is interesting but all the italics and bolding and stuff seemed a bit too much. If you stick to one formatting (like italics) it'll add a calming effect (like The Catcher In The Rye)

But still, awesome work.

Thanks for the advise.
I will work on editing it.

The storyline is interesting but all the italics and bolding and stuff seemed a bit too much. If you stick to one formatting (like italics) it'll add a calming effect (like The Catcher In The Rye)

But still, awesome work.

loves more soon plz plz plz!

Wooo yeah! I got mentioned!! Boo Yarg! verly nice update also, Kinda sad, Mikeys a meany =p

I updated.

awww it's cool!! more when? Soon?

I like it. Please write more when you can!!

xoxo

Thanks. I'll work on getting a new chappieter out.

Ohhh verly interessting!

Rachel likey muchly!!

WUV IT!!! cant wait for more!

Well I wrote that teaser and this messagb via psp. So i'll update probably tomorrow. The story will make sense I hope. I just wanted to see if anyone liked it. Lexie.