Thanks :) Yeah, i went through and fixed most of it up, all that is left is a couple of lowercase I's >.> But just so you know; I'm Australian - We spell words a little different to American spelling.
Awww, so sweet! Do you actually have a point to the story now? :P WRITE A PLOTLINE! It makes it so much less dirty if you already know where you're headed. "I have something to show you..." :O
Dammit, Jess!! And it was going so well! As if you'd run out of ideas! :P Well, obviously she should get with Todd, and obviously he should get hurt somehow. Maybe you should involve some more of her school life; you know, because at the start she was talking about how she isn't accepted and all that? And maybe talk about why her mother suddenly had a change of heart. Keep writing, Jess!
Yeah, i went through and fixed most of it up, all that is left is a couple of lowercase I's >.>
But just so you know; I'm Australian - We spell words a little different to American spelling.