I liked the filler. It told me in more depth what kind of attitude and emotion Bryson had. I liked it. good job.
May 12th, 2009 at 06:41pm
Autumn Remembrance - Comments
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Waw, you're a really amazing writer ;D!May 11th, 2009 at 06:14pm
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wow. Derek. I never knew you could write liek this.
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your description lgihts me on fire. Holy guacomole. its great. I love how you write the characters feelings so spectacularly that I feel them as I am reading. It sokay if chapters are short, because they are well written. James Patterson's chapters are usually a page and a half. so its alright.
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you have some typos int here, I don't remeber where, but when you update i'll find them so your story can be perfect.
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I love how Bryson sees no faces... and Alice. love the name by the way. and what else... i look for an update an dim subscribing. you are truly talented. oh yes, and the Hollywood love and the genuine love. greatness.
fantabulous Derek.
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Can't wait for the next part =)April 19th, 2009 at 10:56pm
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<3 !!!!April 19th, 2009 at 10:54pm
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So here you go :)April 14th, 2009 at 03:58am
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And you deserve more comments than thisApril 14th, 2009 at 03:58am
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More greatness, yay! :D
Can't wait to see what happens next.
Can't wait to read more beautiful details.
The part about his grief was fantastic!April 14th, 2009 at 03:57am -
It's a very descriptive tale. I felt like I was the cameraman there XP
Chapter 3 is the best so far in my opinion. LOVE the description about death. <3
Thanks for inspiring me :DApril 12th, 2009 at 06:45pm
