Oh, wow. Seriously your writing is just... :cheese:
Thick, like honey that dripped and ran. Sweetest nectar that corrupted your soul, made you beg for more like an opium addict.
That was my favourite part. Your descriptions and metaphors were so detailed - I could literally see, feel and taste the whole thing happening right in front of me.
The only thing is that is was quite short, but I shall wait for the second chapter patiently.
I love your writing style, and I really like this. :D