Daylight - Comments

You're such a tease....

Re: Chapter 45 (Yes, it appears as though I'm behind. But go you!! I love getting a good writing streak, myself.)

Your descriptive skills are enviable. When Joe and Pet were on their way to the hotel, I could "see" him with the sun on his skin, all warm and glowing. Great job!

Like Pet, I find it weird that he didn't remember where she was from and who of her family lived there. If it was me and I'd been seeing this guy for a few months and he forgot this, like it wasn't important to him, I'd be put off. And maybe it WAS important enough to him, but he's a guy, and (as I'm well learning) they really do not think like we do. If that's what you're portraying, again, you do it very well!

The scene on the bed where he's pretending to be asleep was golden. I love a man with a sense of humor! He made ME smile by teasing her.

Sephora and spicy food, eh? Sounds like someone I know! :D

Call me nostalgic or call me a romantic, but I liked the normalcy of them walking down the street together after dinner. It got me thinking, though. That must be so rare on tour. It was nice to see them enjoy something like that together. I almost feel bad for them that they're not dating in the traditional way, but maybe that's just me right now.

Loved the chaper (as if you can't tell). And I promise to equally analyze the next one as soon as I get to it! ;)

Oh loved it, loved it, loved it. But how very evil of you to stop there! More soon, please.

That was sooooo sweet. :]
I really do love Daylight, and I really do hope you update soon, or I may explode.
Patience is something I need to work on . . . hmm . . . x]

Wow I love the way you write! The characters are so real, the way they think and speak. LOL for food before shower.

And this... "I was thrumming with the music, the beat, the song itself; so much so that when the song ended, two and a half minutes and a lifetime later, and Joe asked if I wanted to go, all I could do was nod and let him lead me away"

Wow I love that!!!! More soon! I demand it. LOL

SO good to check in with these characters again. Joe and Pet continue to make me smile, and it looks like Viv and Shoshi have discovered their common bond: Pet's well-being. What a lucky girl to have so many people looking out for her, really.

I totally adore this story, and I hope to see more of it very very soon! The characters and place and everything is so complex and realistic. I love it. :]

Wow I was so glad to see you updated. I love this story ..the way you capture moments with words is wonderful. It all just flows and seems so real. Hope you update again soon.

OhMyGod. this is ah-may-zinggggg!

Aw, I love the camaraderie between Pet and Tia. And I love that Tia, unlike their band mates initially, was so cool about Pet's choice thus far. I think she gave some very sound advice, too. With all the other circumstances involved in the situation with Joe, Pet should absolutely follow her instincts, whatever that might be at the time. And knowing Joe, he'll be as wonderful as ever, no matter what does or doesn't happen. :) Great chapter, Michele.

I've loved Shoshi since the first line of this story, but I'm really digging Tia, too. What an awesome friend, and what great advice she gives! The Victoria's Secret impulse shopping is a good sign--c'mon, Pet, you know he's right for you! He's been such a good boy, and he's an incredible kisser. Trust your heart, woman, and you'll know what to do!

Wow, I cannot wait to see what happens next!

This was...breathtaking. It was sensual, but mostly very sweet, and loving, and romantic. I wish I worked where you do, if it inspires something that beautiful!

God, I love how their parts mirror each other, and how it's the eyes that capture them. He's so close--and if they stay together at the hotel, it'll be the perfect opportunity!!!

Oh yesssss! I got back on and found lovely, lovely new chappies! #40 was so good--full of tension, and misunderstanding, and hesitation, all the stuff that makes new love so nerve-wracking! And they are still just so sweet together. I want him to tell her how he really feels so bad I can taste it! But I guess he's got to choose his moment, and when he does, I know it'll be worth it.

Okay, let me go read #41 now! **applause for you, amazing lady!**

So totally into this chapter. It was absolutely touching and it choked me up. The want and need for Pet and Joe to say how they feel for one another is just perfect. It's so hard to know what's real, and they worry about putting themselves out there like that. I know. And this, They make her eyes look like stars, was simply poetic. Well done. VERY well done.

I agree about new relationships being a challenge and the way you are writing this really shows that fact. It's very realistic and that's great. More soon?????

Sadly, I have wigged out as much, if not more, than Pet did in this last chapter - and over far less. (I would hope I haven't been unaware of a lie!) New relationships are such a challenge! You have to work out those oh-so-important communication issues, which is what Pet and Joe are trynig to do. But the process can be a struggle. Again, the progression of their relationship is something I can completely understand right now, and you convey that mutual anxiety so well! Kudos to you, Michele!

Dye: I edited the last chapter slightly so Joe's actions would make a little more sense. I mean, obviously, he's being chicken, but only because he's not sure what to say to Pet, or how to say it.

Ha! Joe is such a GIRL!!! He didn't want her to see him looking awful....BAH! It felt Pet was being a bit of a pain, but...hey, I was young once too. Nice transitional chapter. Now onto some of the meat in the story.

Was so excited when I saw over at Twitter that you had updated. Love this story. You are such a wonderful writer. The storyline is great but the way you make your characters come to life is what sets this story apart from others.

Now Joe, don't go making us lose our faith in you, darlin'! Man up, put yer balls in yer mouth, and go get that woman! She'll make you forget all about that other hussy, for sure!

And quit putting your brother in the middle--poor Tom! He ought to thump you for that!

Beautifully done, madame--and what was that I heard about another story?????????????

HMMMMMMMMMMMM??????????????????????? :)