Eloquence - Comments

It makes me SO happy that you've FINALLY updated this! Besides Sparkle Baby Shine, this is my favorite story by you! I thought you had abandoned this story and that seriously depressed me! It's one of the most well thought out and realistic stories I've ever read on Mibba. Your attention to detail and the human emotion is magnificent, it's true and believing. This story is very well written and I'm just so excited to read more!

And... Girl! Stop complaining about comments :P haha we've gone ages without an update!! What do you properly expect? I kid... Except not really. But this story is great and you are great and I can't wait to read more!!!!!!
-Courtney

This is one of the best things I've ever read on this site. It's so original and very real... I love the way the characters actually have depth and real traits to them; niether of them are just perfect.

It's beatiful and amazing and I love it. Can't wait for more:)

I just spent the last few hours reading this story. You have no idea how much I love it. I was sad to see that I came to the last updated chapter. I can't wait to read more! :)

That was beautiful and just so sweet!

This update was great. :) andrew is a sweetie haha.

The Velvet Underground, such a good band. And very Andrew lol :) Nice update.

I'M SO HAPPY YOU UPDATED I love this story <3 It's so adorable

Love this story!
im glad you updated its been a long time already
update soon please!!

I got giddy when I saw this was updated. I have to say I thought it was brilliant. I love how Jordan's innocence and Andrew's recklessness play off of each other. It's perfect. I didn't think he would be capable of something so sweet, but alas, you prove me wrong. :] Bravo, my friend.

very cute. glad you finally updated. this is my favorite of yours (:

This story is amazing! I just decided to read some of your other stories after you updated stadium love and omg this is really good. I think you should update it ;) haha.

this is an amazing story!

This was just so... UGH.
Fooking beautiful. It seems I'm a bit late to the party, but I REALLY think you should update.
I'm trying my damnedest not to put scenarios in my mind, for I never want to expect what happens next, you know?
The best part about this is how believable Jordan and Andrew are as teenagers. Especially Jordan, feeling that same way I think every 15 year-old girl had felt at least once, wanting to be a woman without giving up your youth too soon. Oh, and having unbearable parents- it was like "Girl, tell me about it!"
Andrew's character, however, makes me laugh more. Being 18 and sexually frustrated is like a birthright for being a male.
There are a few minuscule grammar mistakes, and I wasn't sure how closely to canon you were sticking (with Andrew's real birthday being in February, but saying he was born a little after Jordan's October 7 date. I could actually care less if you don't care, I was just curious if the Andrew in this story had reached 18 yet or not).
Besides that, oh my god. I love it.

oh my gosh, update please? :D I am in love with this story!

can you please update?!

more pleaseee! I love this story! Their relationship is cute!.... even if he can be somewhat of a jerk at times :)

i love this story so much finally a andrew vanwyngarden story that i like. its so romantic and cute. please put up the new chapter soon im getting impatient lol.

update please??

Pretty layout and good writing... Awesomelicious.

I love Jordan's innocence and how you don't rush the plot at all. I love how the chapter flowed nicely and was practically flawless.