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"He wore a scarf around his head."

"That doesn't make him ugly." She insisted. "It makes him... Interesting."

LOL! LOL! LOL! How appropriate! Oh my gosh this story is adorable! I like how its developing so far with him completely eluding her by being all mysterious and such as well as her being naive but clever at the same time. That seems to be a consistency with your female character, but its refreshing. Like, in quite a few stories the girls seem, I don't know... not so humble? I can't think of the right word at the moment but I hope I made sense.
Any how, I'm really enjoying this one so far, and you're making me like him more than I did before, so kudos to you! (:

nice update ! (:

This is addictive. More soon?

wow, i dont even know who this andrew guy is, but im interesteddddd :)

wow. i love this story already. i love mgmt and i this is the first story i've found. it's sooo great. :]
andrew is so adorable.

So. Because of you I'm going through this madly obsessive Andrew phase. I can't stop going on about him, it's so intense. If you hear he goes missing, know it was me. I LOVE THIS STORY. I don't even know how to describe it. I wish I was Jordan. What I'd GIVE to be able to lie on his bed and hold his hand. XD On a real though, you have some serious talent. You have a way of just drawing your readers in, as well as thinking up amazing storylines. It takes me ages to think of one I'm happy with.
Update soon?

Oh my God, seriously, if you don't update soon, I will go crazy. Ah, two chapters in and I'm already addicted.

two chapters in, and i'm already starting to really like this story :) update soon..

"Why do you have a scarf tied around your head?" She mumbled. "Are you a ninja?"

thats my favortie part. lol, write soon. its good.

This is so great!
I love MGMT!
In your story its like they are actually talking to each other :)
They're very lifelike is i guess what i'm trying to say :)
Update soon!

I already love, love, love this.
And I don't even know who MGMT is, but I'm looking them up.
I can't wait for the next chapter..

I have never even SEEN an MGMT story before. but I love this. and I love MGMT. so total plusssssss girrrlll.

grassy smells aren't usually good things. good being legal. :) unless it's just grass, which it isn't. you bad kid!

very nice. very lovely. kinda creeperish. but really, how else do stories gets started. SOMEONE has to do some creeping.

very nice,
I decided you are like a vacuum, you really know how to suck us in

I love this story!
And shes homeschooled, like me! :D
I can't wait to see where you're going with this one.

I love this already, I'm so excitied. I don't even know how you do it, but Andrew seems so intriguing. I want to steal him. This sounds like a seriously promising story, so I'm hoping you'll be updating this often. And I want to know what the grassy smell is, he just changed the topic. XD He's so sexy, wow. I would quote, but I'd just end up copy and pasting the whole chapter, so... know you have one very pleased fan.

Even though I love MGMT, I've never read a story about Andrew before, so I'm really excited. Sounds amzing so far, hope you update soon!

"You mean that weird grassy smell?"
He laughed. "Yeah, that."
"What was that?"
"You ask a lot of questions." He chuckled.
lolz. I love you so much for adding that!
What a naughty boy that Andrew fellow is, trying to corrupt Jordan with his cigs. Such a typical bad ass move. (;
Two chapters in, and I'm hooked. LOVEit!

I love it even though I have no clue who the hell the guy is.
x]

I'm really happy you're writing this. I look forward to more!