Eloquence - Comments

i want more [: right now!

i'm absolutely in love with this story!!
i love how jordan is so mature for her age. and i also love how you don't portray andrew as some sappy guy who just melts over jordan, he seems real, and it makes me like him even more!!
i know you haven't updated in a while, but i'm DYING to know what happens next!!
please update, or at least tell me what happens hah.
you're a really talented writer :)

Ohh, this is getting so good! I honestly love your writing style; you really know how to tell a story. And it's really cool how you don't try to make it seem like Jordan and Andrew are perfect -they both have faults, and it's realistic, as opposed to some other stories I've read. You don't write the perfect I-met-the-guy-and-we're-so-in-love-the-very-next-day type of stories. Well done! Update soon, please?

Yay for Jordan realizing he's a jerk.
Not Yay for Andrew being a jerk.

Kindergarten comment aside, I really like how you're portraying Andrew. He isn't glamorous or too sweet- he's a guy that has faults, and you show that very well. Jordan, aside from being naive and persuadable, has like next to no faults, though. I think this works in the case of your story, because you're showing how different the two are and what a bad influence Andrew is. Sorry if this doesn't make sense, haha, it's kind of late.
Overall, I love this story and I feel like I know everyone in it. I'd like to see some of Andrew's friends, though, because they really do provide a very large indirect influence in The Corruption of Jordan, as I like to call it.

I just stumbled upon this and haven't even gotten past the first paragraph, but I must tell you now (before I forget) that I already love it!
It's not very often that I stumble upon something involving MGMT on mibba, so I'm beyond ecstatic that the one time I look I find one so well written.

I love you for this :)

Wow this is so good! I love Andrew and you never find stories about him. Please write more!

yes an update! I'm so in love with this story!
great update! Andrew you jerk! I hope he fixes this!

I love the new layout, it's gorgeous! I am so glad you updated, I missed this story so much. I love how you captured the element of her insecurities, it felt so real to me. Amazing update, and I hope he fixes this. Just sayin', haha.

I hope he learns from his mistakes '-_-
Other than that, it's a nice chapter.

ANDREW YOU BLOODY BASTARD. How could he :{ Update soon!

thoughts: YOU'VE BEEN AWAY FOR WAY 2 LONG!!!
you make me remember why i love this story so.
i really hope u continue to update
the waits between each update are ridiculous and unbearable
Andrew= asshole.
but for some reason i LOVE HIM.
but i hate him for hurting Jordan. U should do a chapter in his P.O.V and like tell his side of what happened... i think that'd be cool. but its just a thought :)
im really late on this... i just now got the email about this being updated. ugh. BUT anyway i love this story soo much! and i really cant wait till the next chapter!!! :)

yay!!
finally yur back
i liked the chapter!
it was really good.
i feel bad for jordan, how could andrew do that to her

Oh. Right. I just reread this, and I just wanted to say WHAT AN ASSHOLE. Okay. I'm good. :]

JERK IS RIGHT. :(
fifteen year old girls not to be messed with! xP

Ughhhhhhhhhhh, I love this story sooooooooo god damn much <3
I'm so glad it's back, I missed it when it was gone.

I love this story :)
alot. you neeeeeed to update more though. Pretty please? ahaha :3

I love your story and I can't wait for an update. :]

Wow, what a jerk. I cant wait for more!

AH! I love you for updating this sooo much. :] It was splendid.

lovely update

<3