I always find Shino's match kind of boring since theres too much talking. (even in the anime)..xD I'm glad you didn't even bother with it. Great job! :] I hope to see an update soon, please!
I'm just letting you know that you are writing this in first person and third person at the same time. You put everyones thoughts in there (like you would do in third person), but instead of putting Kimina you put "I" which confuses me. We aren't really supposed to hear the others' thoughts unless Kimina is a mind reader. Other than that...I really love this chapter! I loved how you described things! :] Keep up the good work.
Oh my goodness. I'm really getting into this! I want to know more! Oh, she'll be okay. This story is about her, she can't die. XD But yesh, 'tis very good. ^_^
AAAAAHHHHHH WHAT'S HAPPENED!???? THIS CAN'T BE! KIMINA! DEAD! THAT PRACTICALLY MEANS THE STORY IS OVER, WHICH PRACTICALLY MEANS MY LIFE IS OVER!!! ... Just kidding!
But seriously, she's going to come back alive, right? Reserection? Healing power? Some cool kind of genjutsu/ninjutsu? A trick? A horrible and twisted joke? Not actually death, right?
I'm commenting from my new iPhone! :) Anyway, the updates are getting better and better, and I really can't wait for the next one? Who will Kimina fight? Will she win? Why did Rakuyo forfeit? So many questions… Write more please!
Rakuyo!!!! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! *sniffs* I liked him..... :'( And I wonder why he left. And oh!! Who is she fighting!?!? Huh, huh? Who? XD Haha, I really like this story....I think I've told you that a million times...but you deserve 'em. :) But yeah, I hope she kicks some major arse! And she better not back down either. Sometimes she does, and it bugs me. She needs to be more confident! ^_^
That was wonderful!
And all of the fighting....gah! I loved it!! :)(: