*new reader* wow this story is really good, souch description and beautifully written. at the moment i'm mid way and i look forward to reading more, just thought i'd cut in and say how much i liked this story. :-)
First off, I wanna say how much I love this story. The language and the way you write it is amazing. So is the way you portray Ray. Second off, Anna's so cute! How can they not like her!
just read this all the other day, & its amazing! SO cute & sweet, & you've obviously put a lot of time & effort into this, as opposed to the stories that sound rushed & dont make sense or flow properly. this is fantastic, & you write it so well! cant wait for more, but obviously, you've got other things going on that should be put first. i'll be here waiting though, no doubt about that =)
Who doesn't love some "uber-cute fluff"? Loved the update. And take your time, you shouldn't feel guilty about updateing. We understand you got stuff going on.
"Star shimmers, can you feel it? Star falls, did you cry? Life demands the best of all, You fight the broken limb, Settling for the least, Sweating bullets without understanding, Just who you're dying for.
He walks along the edge of the crowd, Never blending, always fading, Until the Ides of March have found him, And embrace the bitter cold of heart..
Goodnight, Moon, Goonight, Stars, But never fade away He needs the light To guard the night And deliver her to day
The White Blossom shines with moonglow, And she pulls him into sanity, Still fighting the broken limb, Till Darkness steps away from her, And he is all she has.
Goodnight, Moon, Goonight, Stars, But never fade away He needs the light To guard the night And deliver her to Day
And sympathetic eyes can never hold, And never understand, But thank you, just the same.
Goodnight, Moon, Goonight, Stars, But never fade away He needs the light To guard the night And deliver her to day
Goodnight, Moon, Goonight, Stars, But never fade away He needs the light To guard the night And deliver her to day."
Fucking beautiful if you ask me.
Don't downgrade yourself so much. Take pride in what you write. That's amazing.