Astronaut. - Comments

I hope they are okay <3

oh goodness.. no.
agh I hope they don't die.

Oh lord, don't kill em off!
I really hope you don't kill either of em. pleasee!

I love this story so much. Cliffhangers are mean, you know. :D

Oh Lora Joan's so cuteeeeee.

Cute. =]

I drew a ballerina in my sketchbook and wrote "Astronaut" below it. People become very confused by it. I can't help but smile.

The little old lady is so sweet. All your characters are so full and rich in personality, like they're real and you're just writing down the essense of their life time...if that makes any sense at all. I really like this story so much. I'm glad you updated.

M o r e s o o n p l e a s e

I love the thing about God having a gender. It's so true. I'm so glad that you have updated after so long. I think about this story all the time. I'm so happy that we finally got to see some of Noah's tattoos. (Did I ever tell you that I love your character's names? Well I do.)

Taking her cue with a twinkle in her eye, the old woman began. “I do believe in a God, but it’s certainly not a He. God doesn’t have a gender, because sex changes things. It always does, whether you’re a deity or a mortal. Men got strength, women got intelligence. Men look to the future while women linger in the past. Meanwhile, the present is all forgotten. God doesn’t have a gender. God exists in the present, and it’s the one in charge!” She let out a burst of laughter, then sipped her nearly black tea with subdued chuckles. “That says something right there. Why do you think everyone down here is so miserable? Nobody lives in the present. We’re all in control of our own lives, and we waste them wanting a time we don’t have.” Her faintly yellow teeth flashed in a smile. “I’m happy. Have you noticed?”

My favorite paragraph. Do I have permission to quote you on that whenever I feel like it?

AWWWWWWWWWWWWW

Ohmygosh, that was the most cutest story ever. I cried, and I cried. I cried for Jupiter, I cried for Lora Joan, I cried for Mama, I cried for Noah. This story made me feel that love is neverending. Cliche, but doesn't this story make your heart beat a little faster? Make you smile? Make you feel just soaring in bliss? Oh how I loved this story. Thank you thank you thank you, for you and break.my.bones. for writing this story. I hope to see this published. Keep on writing beautifully, and elegantly! You're a marvelous writer, so so marvelous. <3

Thank you for writing such a beautiful story. It is original, has original and believable characters, interesting and original themes, an interesting plot, and very much emotion. You write with beautiful style and use flashbacks in a way that is very pleasant. You write vivid and colorful descriptions.

I have noticed few, if not no, grammatical or spelling errors, and your layout is pleasing to the mind and readable.

You have obviously put a lot of thought and effort into this story. You deserved author of the month at Project Fiction. Thank you once again for writing.

The first time I read this chapter all I could think about was how selfish Noah was for leaving. He has this woman he loves so much and he can't stop thinking about what else is out there. Why did he have to go away to find out who he is? The second time I read it I could see how much it was hurting him...but my opinion hasn't really changed. He needed to go but it was completely unfair. Jupiter was left behind in misery while he went off and played with a band and toured the world and did drugs on a beach with some old indian dude. There is more to it, there are moments when I see how much it pains Noah to be away from Jupiter but it's not shone much. Primarily I see him off having fun and her suffering. To justify Noah's leaving I think there needs to be more on his pain. I need more of a reason to sympathize for him.

Your writing pretty much takes over my mind when I'm reading it.
I have no hope of getting any thoughts through my brain.
It's just so mesmerizing and so flawlessly written that I just get lost in it.
By far, one of my favorite stories ever written. :D

Awww that was such a heat breaking chapter

ooo... even though that's the past and he came back.. it was still really sad to have him leave.

i kind of wanted to slap noah across the face.
is that bad?

Amazing chapter.

I loved how you made the husband come back, I really want to read about how she brakes up with the husband and goes with Noah, and what happens there. Is that going to be told, or not?

Naw, so sad when Noah leaves her :(

You write beautifully, i must say :)

Grr Noah don't leave!