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  • storystereo

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    Interesting story idea. Going to subscribe.

    Um, just a little tip about the layout: I had a little trouble reading a little of the chapter starts because of the picture. I don't know if anyone else had this problem, but if you need to fix it, just move it to the left. >>Please don't take it wrong. Just trying to give a construcive review on it. <=)
    January 25th, 2011 at 01:01am
  • Malfoy

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    Loved it! You have to update again :)
    Sorry I haven't commented in so long, went on a slight hiatus
    December 9th, 2009 at 05:39am
  • Howl

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    Ha! Yesh! Finally! So happy joo updated dish yesh! Looking forwrd to da next chapter.
    September 22nd, 2009 at 09:31am
  • Dodger

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    Oh that chapter was amazing!!!!
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    Can't wait for more love!
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    September 19th, 2009 at 12:29pm
  • Malfoy

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    I like the way this sounds! :mrgreen: I hope you're planning on beginning the, actual story soon. I'll definitely subscribe!
    August 24th, 2009 at 09:54pm
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    I can't see how this is going, which makes it interesting :D

    Also, I can help you with some things like linking pictures and rearranging your summary/first chapter. The whole character information thing in the first chapter is halfly not allowed yet kind of boring.

    Example being, instead of telling the readers, show the readers.

    She’s a Steampunk grease monkey. Most people think that she loves cars and motorcycles more that people, but she really does care for her friends a lot in the end… if they’re really, really close. She defends herself by saying that machines are easier to understand than humans. They’re predictable and controllable.

    Why not this:
    "Machines are easier to understand than humans. Predictable and controllable" With a knowing smile, Quin turns back to her piece of work, a '67 Chevy with a need to tighten a few.

    While under the hood and away from her friend's vision, she lets out a sad sigh.

    It was just a suggestion and you don't need to take it :D
    August 21st, 2009 at 10:59pm
  • Casey_Goes_Rawr

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    This is awesome! I can't wait to see what's going to happen!
    July 1st, 2009 at 10:33pm
  • Howl

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    Yay! Second comment! In yer visage first commenter. ^_^
    Oh right!
    Ish it not obvious? I vont moaaaar, for obvious reasons. Love how this started out, want to see what happens to steam punk girl...I can't guess where she'll land up. (skips off)
    June 22nd, 2009 at 09:29pm
  • Dodger

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    woo first comment
    :P
    Can't wait for more
    Dance
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    June 18th, 2009 at 03:33pm
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