That was a great ending. Sad, but not cliche. A sequel would be cool, to see what ends up happening... An epilogue maybe? Like, some odd amount of years into the future to show where they all ended up, but that might just be because I love this story too much and don't want it to end. You're a great writer, thank you for writing this!!
Huh, I never posted a commented on this!? D: Well, I really like this story, and I love the layout. And it's okay if you don't work on it as much, I can wait XD
This is actually really good :) The plot is original, and it has some twists and turns. Also, I like reading from a guy's prospective, instead of a girl's. It's very refreshing.
Additionally, the grammar and punctuation are very good, and it is easy and clear to read. Good job :) I subscribed! :D