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  • oxford comma.

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    Pinocchio

    My favorite lines:

    My words come out funny and I hope he thinks I’m drunk. But he doesn’t. ‘Cause he knows better. They always know better. I always know worse.

    But Pinocchio was a real boy at the end.
    December 17th, 2007 at 07:42am
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Pinocchio.
    December 17th, 2007 at 07:32am
  • oxford comma.

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    Attempts

    I like the italics and that it was just a word, or a short sentence.
    I like Ryan's apathy {?} in this.

    My favorite lines:

    “I’m fine.” Ryan said, voice flat. “I wasn’t doing anything. I was just practicing.”
    “Practicing what?” Brendon asked.
    “Dying.”

    ...almost screamed. Almost. Not quite.
    December 17th, 2007 at 07:17am
  • we are galaxies.

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    “People don’t practice dying.” Brendon said, voice tight, words short, eyes overly bright.

    I love the perspective of this story. I could see how Brendon and Ryan were feeling, not just one of them. The plot made sense and the tense was perfect.

    It wasn't too long, but it wasn't too short. You portrayed it perfectly.

    This was morbidly beautiful, like in a twisted way. I just wanted to get in their heads and figure things out, like a brain sort.

    Amazing job. <333
    December 17th, 2007 at 01:25am
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Attempts.
    December 17th, 2007 at 12:38am
  • Frankie007

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    I like the way that you portray Ryan in these

    It's like he craves attention, but the doesn't want it.

    I really like it...

    :)
    December 13th, 2007 at 09:24pm
  • RENT.

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    Little Boy Lose.

    Oh my fuck.
    I loved how each paragraph was a completely different scene.

    And the Ryan. Bullet. ending was harsh and effective.

    <33
    December 4th, 2007 at 07:24pm
  • oxford comma.

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    druscilla; forget.:
    I leave the rest of the moments up to your interpretation.
    It's just one of those pieces where there's no certain way it needs to be read.
    Okay, good to know.
    I sometimes like when thing can be read like that so people can emotionally embrace it more.
    December 3rd, 2007 at 01:50pm
  • folie a dru.

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    In Little Boy Lost, Ryan did shoot himself.
    I leave the rest of the moments up to your interpretation.
    It's just one of those pieces where there's no certain way it needs to be read.
    December 3rd, 2007 at 01:43pm
  • oxford comma.

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    The Amateur Photographer

    This one left me slightly confused, but at the same time not. I think I got what is being said, but the fact that I couldn't quite figure it out made it that much better.
    I liked how you described what Ryan and Brendon are for each other.

    My favorite lines:

    It was like when an amateur photographer picked up their shitty off-brand camera and took a snapshot that happened to be a beautiful, priceless, classic photograph. Black and white, clean lines, emotion captured on the 35 mm film.

    It was easy to see, if you tried, that they weren’t meant to be apart.

    Ryan wasn’t complete without Brendon.
    Brendon wasn’t himself without Ryan.

    A glimpse into a secret can leave you speechless, stop you in your tracks, make you stare in wonderment, make you try and find words for what it really, truly, honestly is.

    Nothing ever destroyed wonder like proof.

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    Little Boy Lost

    I liked this. I liked the little moments between Ryan and each person.
    But the ending makes me think Ryan shot himself, which makes me wonder if all those moments were Ryan testing his limits, seeing if anyone would stop him, try to bring him back. Save him.

    My favorite lines:

    ....hands outstretched in case of an untied shoelace.

    ....bottle in one hand and empty wishes in the other.
    December 3rd, 2007 at 01:39pm
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabbles.
    + The Amateur Photographer with video accompaniment.
    + Little Boy Lost.
    December 3rd, 2007 at 12:53pm
  • folie a dru.

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    Yeah, it's meant to be metaphorical tape.
    I wrote this at about 5 am so...
    December 2nd, 2007 at 05:43am
  • oxford comma.

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    Tape

    I'm guessing it's metaphorical tape, but I could be wrong.
    I really liked the opening line.

    My favorite lines:

    There were no drawers in the dressers, no clothes in the drawers.

    “Well, of course you put the tape on with kisses, silly. How else do you put tape on?”
    December 2nd, 2007 at 12:20am
  • Sensual Violation

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    Sensual Violation:
    That was really sweet.
    December 1st, 2007 at 08:06pm
  • folie a dru.

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    The following drabbles now have audio recording accompaniment:
    Tedious. Tape. Harsh. Cut Me Up. Bleeding Sheets. Dying Hurts.
    December 1st, 2007 at 07:24pm
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Tape.
    December 1st, 2007 at 06:42pm
  • Morbid-Is-Part-Goth

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    (slightly hysteric laughter)
    its like this one dream when.....(blabbles)
    Sharpie-wait oh no, DEAD PIECE OF MEAT ON THE ROAD!!!!!
    November 14th, 2007 at 09:51am
  • itscalledmusic

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    cooooooooool. ^^
    November 10th, 2007 at 01:48pm
  • oxford comma.

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    Harsh

    My favorite lines:

    I'm still waiting for my heart to explode in my fucking chest.

    I'm surprised the sky is still blue.

    My heart's beating in my wrists again.

    Cut Me Up

    My favorite lines:

    They're all for you, baby. All for you. Mark me up some more.

    You see the flash? The glint? The silver running across my skin? You don't. You don't. You're gone. But it's all for you, baby. It's all for you.

    Just give me the rope.
    November 10th, 2007 at 12:47pm
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Cut Me Up.
    Originally posted to Seven Words to Break a Heart, but I took it down before anyone could read it, I think.
    November 8th, 2007 at 12:26am
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