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  • Sensual Violation

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    I didn’t think it was possible to be so dead with a pulse.

    I loved that line.

    I think this is my favourite of all the parts in this.

    I just honestly love it.
    November 7th, 2007 at 01:22am
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Harsh.
    November 7th, 2007 at 01:15am
  • oxford comma.

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    Tedious
    I like Gabe. I like Ryan. Not so sure I'm a fan of Gabe and Ryan together, but it worked here.
    My favorite lines:

    "Time for bed, babe."
    "Too tired."

    When you're consumed by an emotion, thought isn't necessary.
    It's tedious.
    Gabe was never one for tedious.
    October 30th, 2007 at 08:12pm
  • Sensual Violation

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    That was really sweet.
    October 30th, 2007 at 05:32pm
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Tedious.
    Gabe/Ryan.
    Fluff.
    October 30th, 2007 at 11:56am
  • oxford comma.

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    Dying Hurts

    I like that it was Gabe who found Ryan and stayed with him rather than William.
    My favorite lines:

    Was it really an idiot move, what happened next? According to everyone else, yes. But is it their opinion that counts?

    or some other emotion that resulted in tears or toes broken from kicking too-heavy doors.

    "You mean why aren't you dead, right?"

    "....But at least when you're living there's a chance it can get better."
    October 29th, 2007 at 10:55pm
  • Sensual Violation

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    I liked it, especially the "dying hurts', "so does living" part.

    -shrug- I'm a hopeless commenter..person.
    October 29th, 2007 at 05:57pm
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Dying Hurts.
    October 29th, 2007 at 11:54am
  • illegally_legal

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    as usual I thought it was awesome ^^ [been saying that word a lot, can't get out of my mouth].
    my personal fave was 'Voice', tear-jerking in a way QwQ
    October 22nd, 2007 at 11:37pm
  • The Way

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    WOAH.
    That was... intense.
    And scary, at the last part.
    So short, but so... it made me shiver.
    The blood was so simply detailed, yet the description was so full that I pictured it, the red, tasted the metal on my tongue.
    :shock:
    October 16th, 2007 at 06:16pm
  • oxford comma.

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    "Bleeding Sheets"

    I think I understand how the narrator feels/what the narrator means. And when it happens {because at the end he says it will} it's not going to be that he wants to inflict pain, or that he doesn't love the other, it's just sort of that it had to happen. It was inevitable. Perhaps his curiosity will be satisfied.
    I'm not sure if any of that was your intention in writing this, that is simply what I got from it.
    My favorite lines:

    and watch the scream fall out and break out the hardwood floor of our bedroom floor.

    and stiched shut.

    One time I thought about it so hard I got a knife out of the kitchen and cut my finger open and let the blood drip into a cup. I spilled it on the sheets and watched it stain. It scared me. How much I wanted to see more blood, to make you bleed like a vampire's victim.

    And, you, with your trusting blue eyes, never could imagine it happening one night.
    But it will.
    I'm sorry.
    October 16th, 2007 at 10:50am
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    Bleeding Sheets.
    October 16th, 2007 at 09:19am
  • The Way

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    Real, yes.

    But not love.

    Simple but beautifully worded. The atmosphere is of the thing we hate the most: regret.

    Says it all, really.

    Love the FOB quotes in the title and fic.

    Your eloquence will astound me forever. :hug:
    September 16th, 2007 at 11:36am
  • oxford comma.

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    "How You Looked in the Light"

    Smart.
    My favorite lines:

    Quit quoting Pete’s lyrics, Ross. What are you, twelve?

    He hadn’t    meant to lie. But he was next to Spencer, staring at him in the—finally—finished tuxedo and it . . . didn’t seem right. All of a sudden the ‘love’ he had felt for Brendon seemed to fall away.
    September 15th, 2007 at 12:40pm
  • Pikachu

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    ^ Yea...I figured that. ._.
    September 15th, 2007 at 08:14am
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    How You Look in the Light

    :cheese: I can't even think of a good comment for this because its that good.
    Just stop writing so perfect so I can give you con crit. -.-

    It was amazing though. >.>
    How you make everything seem so real in so little description and words is ♥
    Totally believable is what I'm getting at I think. Everything is always so believable. >_<

    <33
    Well, that one was based on life...
    September 15th, 2007 at 07:43am
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    How You Look in the Light

    :cheese: I can't even think of a good comment for this because its that good.
    Just stop writing so perfect so I can give you con crit. -.-

    It was amazing though. >.>
    How you make everything seem so real in so little description and words is &#9829;
    Totally believable is what I'm getting at I think. Everything is always so believable. >_<

    <33
    September 15th, 2007 at 07:42am
  • folie a dru.

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    New drabble.
    How You Looked in the Light.
    September 15th, 2007 at 07:37am
  • Sensual Violation

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    Someone definately needs to link him to this.

    Then make him read it.
    September 5th, 2007 at 04:57pm
  • oxford comma.

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    With Love

    I like the idea/concept explored in this. It was nicely done and I liked the form of story telling you chose.
    My favorite lines:

    I don’t think you understand yourself.

    You smile at the emotion you think is floating between your bodies.

    You think she loves you and that makes you think you love her.

    And eventually love’s going to get sick of you.
    September 4th, 2007 at 10:43am
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