Very excillent. I do hope you don't stop. It makes me believe I'm right there in the story. So realistic. It's wonderful. I just can't explain how good it is.
wordds cant describe the connection i feel between brooklyn and harry i wish she was real gosh I cant believe how much brooklyn has captivatd my heart this was by the greatest best chapter i was almsot screaming out no when I saw the blonde dude was going to take her but then i was so happy it was a dream awesome chapter told ya you could do it Bi
The plot itself is very original, though, I can't help but think Shouldn't Brooklyn be a bit more cold hearted? After all, she was raised by Voldemort himself. The cold hearted, evil, menstrual bitch. His only friend -as far I as know- was Draco, and he's pretty bitchy himself. You adapt your personality around the environment you grow up with, and hers was pretty evil.
Well, putting aside that matter... I really like how you describe things. Oh! I just thought of something.... It's just a hunch, but you never know, eh?
Is Dorthey Brooklyn's mother? I'm 89.9% she is. Well, Dorthey is dead, so why not? As I said, it's only a hunch.