The Last Nyxen - Comments

I love Brooklyn's personality, I don't dislike anything about the story, and your writing sounds mature enough :]

omg i luvv it. uppddattte

omg i luvv it. uppddattte

I love it. There is nothing I dislike about it. I love it alot. It's sooooo freaking awesome. Haha

Yay for updating! I seriously have nothing to hate about this story! I love all of it! I just have the thought in the back of my mind that Voldemort's going to come to Hogwarts and kill Brooklyn in her sleep.... Well, maybe not that drastic, but you get what I'm saying. :D Yes, it sounds mature, too. Amazing story! Good job!

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-What's one thing you hate, or dislike, in this story?
-What's one thing you love?
-Does my writing sound mature enough?

Okay... Well heres something I hate. I hate that I can't find anything to dislike about your story even if it's just one lonely spelling mistake because I really wanted to please you and give some constructive criticism. Trust me I tried. I went back to chapter one and skimmed through the whole story looking for something, ANYTHING! But alas my dear I came up clean.

The one thing I love? Well that's easy... The fact that I actually reread a story just looking for something to ping you on and I found nothing. Is that enough? Eh not good enough for me... I love that this story is so incredibly unique I'm going to remember it for a long time because I know I'm never go to read anything like it ever again. Unless you are the author. :cute:

And finally. Does your writing sound mature enough? Honey, your writing is so intense you can give me goosebumps.

Keep up the good work. I hope my lame answers gave you some comfort since you're obviously feeling insecure about your story. BTW that's not a bad thing. By asking us to answer questions you can really build your skills. Not that you need to change anything because I think this story is perfect.

To the first two questions....I hated nothing and I loved everything! lol and the third question...You sound definetly mature enough!
I can't wait for the next update! :D

1. only thing i don't like is....nothing. Havn't started hating anything yet. Just don't start re-telling the entire harry potter. I hate it when hp fanfic writers do that. It's sort of like, I already read the book...why repeat it?
2. Brooklyn, she is just plain awesome. Tough and independent but fun.
3. Mature? I wish I could write AS mature as you =)

just keep updating =)

oh and if you have time, and if i have already not asked you yet, do you think you can check out my harry potter fanfiction? And sorry if I have already told you this, I can never remember who i ask to read my stories...

ok, well i so love your stor y and i think it's great, but something that bothers me is it kind of lays it on too thick in the romantic scenes. in the books, harry is always so awkward around love, and it would kind of make sense that brooklyn is too, because she's been trapped in her father's house for so long.

that's just the one thing that i don't like too much, but your writing is VERY mature, don't worry about it.

1.nothing much but i do kinda hate the big ego harry has well idk it seems kinda off
2.i love brooklyn and how she brings out the good in harry
3.hun your writing sounds like a 24 year old writer that has written 300 novels before you lol

omg AMAzing I was loving this chapter love the mention of cedric hmm i loved him i really did
so so so sad gosh anyway this chapter was amazing really really good i mean it i was spectacular good job hun

-What's one thing you hate, or dislike, in this story?: I would say I hate anything, or really dislike anything. But sometimes Harry seems a little to out of character. He comes off sometimes with to big of an ego. But it's not a problem really.

-What's one thing you love?: Must I only choose one? I love how you write, you give Brooklyn a strong voice. Plus I love your characters and how you describe things without over describing them.

-Does my writing sound mature enough?: Yes I think it's mature enough, don't worry.

Oh poor poor Britt, she's stuck with a bunch of turds for friends. :/ lol.

I love how you can see Harry and Brooklyn's relationship grows so much with each chapter. It's nice really.
Actually scratch that, all of the characters seem to grow close to her, they're her friends and it's nice to see that grow. :)

I feel bad for Brooklyn, I mean so many people are going to judge her. :( I almost feel like she should have been put in Slytherin, because she kinda has those traits. But I'm glad she wasn't put in there, she would have been a sitting duck.

Great update, I can't wait for more!

Hey, I just read the first chapter and it was pretty good. I think I'll subscribe. It was also impressive for a 10 year old. I know I couldn't write like that, and probably still can't. Which really depresses me, but I guess I've live.

I love the story so far Bianca!!! (:

awesome chapter lol i loved it gosh everyday i love brooke more and more and more
lol and ohh is dorethy like dobby im just askin
lol I loved it Bi

Great update!!!
=\ I want to know who gave her the necklace!! I think it was Harry though.... Hmmm.

I LOVED the new chapter!

ohhh. that was good. i'm just saying...i wouldn't listen to the voices in my head. lol.
Did Harry give her the necklace? :3

An action figure the best present any could ever get. End. Of. Story.
hahaha.
One of Cho's nicer friends? lol.

Aww I feel sorry for Brooklyn, I mean, she must be feeling really confused...well I mean it's obvious she is, I just feel really bad for her, you know? She wants to hang with Harry, but she's worried, of course she doesn't know exactly why Dorthy doesn't want her to hang out with Harry, but still.

I'm not sure where you messed up at...like at all...I don't think anyone will see where you messed up at?

Was it the part when someone was by her door, but nobody came in or said anything? I'm curious on who that is...hmm...
:)
Great update!!
Congrats on the 7 stars and reaching the double digits.

awesome. cc: