Cold Blood is Thicker - Comments

BeggingForChanges (100)

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Normally I avoid anything vampire related like the plague. Simply because a majority of it is complete and utter trash.

This, though, is amazing. I was really getting into it, but then there was no more chapters. ::/ I say you update. ::D

Seriously. Update soon.

July 16th, 2010 at 01:41am

Sundance Kid. (100)

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The layout was awesome, and you're a great writer. The quote in the beginning of the prologue was perfect, really drew me in. I can't wait for the next chapter.

July 16th, 2010 at 01:29am

silk tea. (400)

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Oh hello fuck yes.
I am so going to subscribe to this.

July 15th, 2010 at 04:44am

roux. (105)

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I love your layout. Because I have the attention span of a gold fish - I found myself looking at all the pretty whirlies for a few minutes there. xP

But all in one, this is a good story. An awesome one. I like it.

March 25th, 2010 at 02:10am

False Illusions; (100)

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This is really interesting, your descriptions are very detailed. It's so long that I'm only on the second chapter, and could get kicked off the laptop at any moment so I'm going to save the rest of this for the morning.

You're a very talented writer. (:

February 16th, 2010 at 02:46am

x_Vampires_Revenge_x (100)

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lol oops

January 26th, 2010 at 05:17pm

solovely; (100)

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I think you have a wonderful talent. And your character are very developed. Orri, he is very awesome.

November 27th, 2009 at 06:18am

legacy . (100)

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Review:

The layout is love.
Just saying.
But, the red chapter heading color, doesn't really match.

Chapter One:
“And don’t come back!"
Starting off with dialogue - major brownie points for that one.

“Orri? Never heard that name before. It’s almost like the cookie.”
Epic.

First chapter was good. Not great, but still, good. I like how you ended it though. By ending it like that, you made the reader want to click "Chapter 2" to find out what's going to happen with Orri. Perfect, perfect way to end it, and I absolutely adore when readers do that.

Chapter Two:
“Just eternity.” Charlie smiled wickedly and laughed. “I’ve had my eye on you.”
Hoping this isn't going to turn slash-y :-\

Just a note, I probably won't pick out a whole bunch of things to comment on, just because there are so many chapters and I really would like to read them all as opposed to just one. So if the comments I make on each chapter are short, I apologize. If there's not a lot there, it just means I've found nothing for you to improve on.

Chapter Three
“That’s not important.”
I wanted to know!!
I'm very disappointed that I don't know. That'll haunt me for the rest of this story now lol.

Chapter Four:
“Without a doubt, he will fuck you. I can guarantee you he will. Just go with it. Your natural vampire slut instinct will kick in, and nothing will matter.”
I really hope not.

Chapter Six:
Okay, sorry.
This is where I stop.
I really can't read slash in any way, shape, or form.
Just know it has nothing to do with your writing (which honestly, is amazing) but more on.. personal preference.

What I've read so far of the story is amazing, you really are a talented writer, with so much more potential. Amazing job.

November 27th, 2009 at 02:32am