Cold Blood is Thicker - Comments

Normally I avoid anything vampire related like the plague. Simply because a majority of it is complete and utter trash.

This, though, is amazing. I was really getting into it, but then there was no more chapters. ::/ I say you update. ::D

Seriously. Update soon.

The layout was awesome, and you're a great writer. The quote in the beginning of the prologue was perfect, really drew me in. I can't wait for the next chapter.

Oh hello fuck yes.
I am so going to subscribe to this.

I love your layout. Because I have the attention span of a gold fish - I found myself looking at all the pretty whirlies for a few minutes there. xP

But all in one, this is a good story. An awesome one. I like it.

This is really interesting, your descriptions are very detailed. It's so long that I'm only on the second chapter, and could get kicked off the laptop at any moment so I'm going to save the rest of this for the morning.

You're a very talented writer. (:

lol oops

I think you have a wonderful talent. And your character are very developed. Orri, he is very awesome.

Review:

The layout is love.
Just saying.
But, the red chapter heading color, doesn't really match.

Chapter One:
“And don’t come back!"
Starting off with dialogue - major brownie points for that one.

“Orri? Never heard that name before. It’s almost like the cookie.”
Epic.

First chapter was good. Not great, but still, good. I like how you ended it though. By ending it like that, you made the reader want to click "Chapter 2" to find out what's going to happen with Orri. Perfect, perfect way to end it, and I absolutely adore when readers do that.

Chapter Two:
“Just eternity.” Charlie smiled wickedly and laughed. “I’ve had my eye on you.”
Hoping this isn't going to turn slash-y :-\

Just a note, I probably won't pick out a whole bunch of things to comment on, just because there are so many chapters and I really would like to read them all as opposed to just one. So if the comments I make on each chapter are short, I apologize. If there's not a lot there, it just means I've found nothing for you to improve on.

Chapter Three
“That’s not important.”
I wanted to know!!
I'm very disappointed that I don't know. That'll haunt me for the rest of this story now lol.

Chapter Four:
“Without a doubt, he will fuck you. I can guarantee you he will. Just go with it. Your natural vampire slut instinct will kick in, and nothing will matter.”
I really hope not.

Chapter Six:
Okay, sorry.
This is where I stop.
I really can't read slash in any way, shape, or form.
Just know it has nothing to do with your writing (which honestly, is amazing) but more on.. personal preference.

What I've read so far of the story is amazing, you really are a talented writer, with so much more potential. Amazing job.

Yay for charlie! The sexual fiend!
I like it!

Yay for charlie! The sexual fiend!
I like it!

Yay for charlie! The sexual fiend!
I like it!

:yah I really like this.

I love Orri, especially the fact that he doesn't have skin pigments.
I don't know... it makes him interesting. :mrgreen:

Oohh! This sounds interesting! More soon please! :)