thankyou but i got to many assignments and test to study for right now to got hrough and edit it but ill try when i get time but ill post more anyway im up to chapter 25 i think it was so yes this is going to be a long story
good chapter =] if you want to improve your writing and maybe more people will read so you dont have to torture us :D here are some basic tips:
when writing dialogue try and add some description to make us the "readers" feel as though we're right there watching whats going on yeah?
like an example from your current chapter would be (the stuff underlined):
“Hey I just realized something” i spoke up, glancing towards him
try and use easy stuff like that because it lets us keep track of you know the...atomsphere if thats how you can say it lol of whats going on whos looking at who ya know
and that should make your chapters fantasmastastic <<< yes im aware thats like the most effed up word ever created but you get my drift
so keep them coming and if you want more improvement just ask :D
Ok. People please tell me how I can improve. I would like to know if you like the length of the chapters, because I can make them longer if you want, because I'm almost finished the whole story on a word doccument on my computer. And there is always going to be more, until I say, so please don't ask.
finally lol thats it im going to post comments on here more then 3 times to keep these chapters coming :D
good chapter what does the word 'signed' mean, like the way you used it confused me because i only know one meaning and thats to write your signature for example
and for some reason the whole bread thingy ma jig
i found that hilarious :D
pretty cool cant wait for more :tehe: