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  • listen-to-me-whine

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    dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt MIKE dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt dirnt

    =]

    more??

    <3
    August 16th, 2007 at 04:49pm
  • M.P.A.

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    MIKE DIRNT!

    xD

    more soon?    xoxo
    August 16th, 2007 at 12:07am
  • HiddenInShadows

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    This is great!!
    I love it!
    More soon??
    August 15th, 2007 at 02:56pm
  • listen-to-me-whine

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    owww :(
    god i cant imagine myself in her shoes
    and if i could id be bawling my eyes..i wouldnt be able to just try and not cry
    it wouldnt work.

    up for constructive criticism?
    lol well it made me laugh when you wrote somehting on the lines of NOT ALOUD INSIDE...correct me if im wrong but i think you meant NOT ALLOWED INSIDE :tehe:

    overall good chapter

    keep them coming :D
    August 15th, 2007 at 09:50am
  • M.P.A.

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    aw! Cry more soon?xoxo
    August 15th, 2007 at 03:49am
  • HiddenInShadows

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    This is great!!
    More soon?
    August 14th, 2007 at 11:51pm
  • The Brightside

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    I am tempted to know what happens next :]
    Good job.
    August 14th, 2007 at 02:45pm
  • HiddenInShadows

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    I love it!
    This looks like it's going to be pretty good.
    More soon?
    August 14th, 2007 at 01:07am
  • M.P.A.

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    Its awesome, very promising! I can't wait for more!!

    I woke and I didn’t know where I was I was in an unfamiliar room and on an unfamiliar bed then I realized where I was, I was in the orphanage I was put in after what happened yesterday. Thats the first paragraph, it's missing periods in places, its like one long sentence. You should fix that- as well as some ohter grammar problems throughout the story- but other than that there's no problem!!

    -subscribes-    xoxo
    August 13th, 2007 at 10:48pm
  • kara

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    I like the detail. It's very... mysterious in a way. I don't know if it is something I would read, though.
    August 13th, 2007 at 09:33pm
  • The Muffin

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    oh my
    she is alone...
    all by herself...

    *subscribes* this is GOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOD
    August 13th, 2007 at 08:09pm
  • listen-to-me-whine

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    oh lord
    oh my lord

    sydney is bombed *gets worried*
    i live in sydney :|

    dude i like where this story is going
    sounds adventureous
    do tell me she will be meeting a few famous people along the way :tehe:

    its awesome for an intro

    *subscribes*
    August 13th, 2007 at 07:09pm
  • Drag Fairy

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    Ohohoh.
    I like it a lot.
    Moaaaaaaaaar. In Love
    August 13th, 2007 at 05:53pm
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