I think this would be a really great story if you slowed it down a little and made the rising action build up more before you get to the climax of getting married and what not.
Awh, I really like this storie a lot. It was little rocky in teh begining, but it got really good =) Your an awesome writer and I can't wait to read more of this when its updated!
Tis a very very interesting story you've got here, Carrie m'dear! ^_^ I likes it mucho! :D My sister told me there was somebody in here based on me...is that true? More soon. :]
Ahh....the love of comic books... I know that passion, and all the geekiy dorkness Ray, dont worry pal..but seriously, Ray, you and Jordon both need to stop jumping to conclusions.... cause you get them wrong.... *sigh* seriously.... but damn... Tiffi.... no need to freak out and cry just yet... wait till after the yelling, and after you punch him in the face....sorry Ray...
awww.....that was so cute! confusing, but I loved it!!! Amazingnessssss!!! Finally another one, but damn.....Frankie was funny, yet seemed a little slutty! I loved it!! Ahh!! I love you Bri!!!
YAYAYAYYAAYYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!!! I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU I LOVE YOU! I FUCKING LOVE YOU!!! your story is getting posted soon now, like after I re-read this 20 times....
YAY!! YAY! YAY!!! My favorite chapter so far!! YAYAYAYAYAYAYAYAY!!!! I fucking love you, you are now my favorite best friend of the day!!! YAY!!!
we kissed! MIKEY FUCKING WAY LOVES ME! and was snotty to a nurse and made a man faint...dude! I love this chapter!! AH!HH!!!H!H!H!H!HAH!H!H!H
sooo...... this may seem odd, cause it has been a while since you've posted anything, but i had just re-read it three times in a row, cause it was stuck in my head for the past week, damn you for making a good story, and damn me for loving this story...normally i would text you and bug you to update, but im not going to bug you, and my phone is off, and i dont know when it will be on, so sorry if i haven't talked to you in a while... o_o
did I ever tell you how much i seriously fucking love this story.... tis amazing, espcially when you have read it as much as i have lately...keeps getting better, ive keep finding little things ive missed cause i was so excited for an update i didn't catch them...