this is very, very good! My only suggestion is not to let her enjoy herself with him since she knows she shouldn't. it seems like she doesn't have any will power when he kisses her. i mean, she kind of doesn't but like, she shouldn't respond like she did.
dude, write more! now! :D i love this. amaaaazing! but-let me guess. Darius is going to be completley amazing at singing or whatever, right? :) yeah, i'm your new number one #1 fan. :)