Secrets In Our Throats - Comments

wish on a firefly (885)

:: NaNoWriMo 2017
Gender:: ♀
Age:: 33
Location:: United States

Chapter two has me in suspense. These vampires that suddenly came really have me wondering what they want with Gerard and how they know Gerard's vampire 'sire'. You used a lot of descriptions and imagery which really helps set the mood. :)

February 27th, 2013 at 04:01pm

wish on a firefly (885)

:: NaNoWriMo 2017
Gender:: ♀
Age:: 33
Location:: United States

This first chapter was very endearing. I noticed a lot of spelling errors, such a "our" being spelled as "our", but the spelling errors didn't take away from the story as a whole. I feel bad for Franky. He really loves his Gerard. :) <3

February 27th, 2013 at 03:56pm

wish on a firefly (885)

:: NaNoWriMo 2017
Gender:: ♀
Age:: 33
Location:: United States

Hi! I decided to start with your earliest story. I know it may seem a bit amateurish in comparison to your latest stories, but it shows how far you've come as a writer since then. :)

Before I begin, might I say that I'm not a fan of MCR or at least not a big one? But that won't stop me from enjoying your story regardless. Let's get started!

The summary actually draws me in deeply and I want to know more about Gerard's predicament. My next comment will contain an actual comment on the first chapter. :)

February 27th, 2013 at 03:51pm