Angels Fall - Comments

Hey thanks so much, I will have a read through and edit some of the grammatical stuff, I rushed it a bit last night trying to get my thoughts out on paper. I'm going to do some changes that might be confusing but not to worry the character and plot stays the same I just want to add a chapter in to tie the chapters together.

The warewolves are very mysterious at the moment, The onlyone who gets to really become close to them is Kia at the moment and she's the one who will provide a desciption as to what the warewolves are like. But as she hasn't exactly seen Avery morph yet just knows she has some speed. More about them will be explained from Kia's point of view.

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As for the vampires, yes they are fast but not as fast as the warewolves, they have a different ability that will allow them to counter the warewolves speed.

Look forward to further comments.

Interesting.
You have a well thought out plot, a long list of characters, and you seem to be good with character to character relationships. You are very good in dialouge/monolouge. There are a grammatical errors here and there, but It's still readable. I look forward to the story. It sounds well planned and it sounds like it's going to be exciting. I think I will subscribe!

I'm wondering exactly how they look as Werewolves and what the transformation is like. I also wonder if the fact that their Werewolf ages being further than their human years means that they age faster than normal humans.

Oh! You should also add in a Werewolf and Vampire fight. Although, the Vampires sound a little stronger to me.