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Zacky, Brian is her step brother lol

Um, is this a Brian story or a Zacky story? Because in your Summary you're talking about Brian and in your banner picture you have Zack...???

Imagine...:

dude! first comment! well heres some constructive critisizim for you. :)

i think that you should try not writteing it in second person(or is it thrid??? hmmm idunno.) its not a bad story just a bit hard to read. :) dont be disheartened tho cuze i think its got reall potential.

That's the only way I know to write. I try writing in first person but it just goes back to third. Ended up thinking fuck it, if people don't like it, it's their problem :)

Thanks for the comment xxx

dude! first comment! well heres some constructive critisizim for you. :)

i think that you should try not writteing it in second person(or is it thrid??? hmmm idunno.) its not a bad story just a bit hard to read. :) dont be disheartened tho cuze i think its got reall potential.