dude! first comment! well heres some constructive critisizim for you. :)
i think that you should try not writteing it in second person(or is it thrid??? hmmm idunno.) its not a bad story just a bit hard to read. :) dont be disheartened tho cuze i think its got reall potential.
That's the only way I know to write. I try writing in first person but it just goes back to third. Ended up thinking fuck it, if people don't like it, it's their problem :)
dude! first comment! well heres some constructive critisizim for you. :)
i think that you should try not writteing it in second person(or is it thrid??? hmmm idunno.) its not a bad story just a bit hard to read. :) dont be disheartened tho cuze i think its got reall potential.