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  • november rain;

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    Oh, cool. This is the first entry (so far) involving suicide.

    Mm, anyway, that was good, except you need to work on your tenses (past, present). Keep them constant - it's bad grammar.

    It was short (the shortest entry I've read so far) and sweet. Good job. x]
    November 17th, 2009 at 05:06am
  • Oceansoul

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    wow that is so powerful, when i saw the tittle i thought it was an anti abortion story but really it is the mother that kills herself. That gives a really different interesting spin on such a dark situation. Very philosophical. Well done.
    September 21st, 2009 at 08:21pm
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