Boy From the Stars - Comments

Oh wow. :( It's been forever.

I just started reading and I really love it!! It's so creative and different from every other story!! I really like the fire-heart thing and chest-glow thing!! Please update soon, I'm really excited!!!!

I absolutely LOVE your story! Actually I love all your stories!! :) Great job! I can't until you start updating them again!

HOLY FREAKING CRAP!!!

I personally think you have outdone yourself this time!!!

I haven't been on Mibba in a while (All thanks to moving out, doing school, etc...), So haven't been able to see your stories :(

I just have to tell you how much I love your originality. I mean, seriously, this is the most orignal concept I have ever read. I could go on and on forever :)

Well, your comment fairy is back, so be ready for tons of comments on EVERY chapter of EVERY story :DDD

NO! i took too long to finally read this story! im not on the 1st page ccomments. i LOVE this story thoough. originally i didn't read it because it was new and you still didn't update chapter 4 the search for the lucky one. but now i don't care which story you update because i REALLY REALLY LOVE this one.

i don't know if you edited your story yet but i found some mistakes and i will be more than pleased if you need my assistance.

and i have a suggestion can you make the main girl (really bad with names sorry. i remember it starts with a C) have a guy "best" or "close" friend. like she will go to him for advise with this "star boy" (like i said i'm really bad with names) or if she ever wanted "star boy" be jealous she can use him. i don't know if this will make your story really complicated but it was a idea that i suddenly thought of.

a question (or two if i think of other while i'm typing). i'm really sorry if you answered this question already but how old is the main girl. i know "star boy" is 17 or 18 in human years but how old is the girl. [i'm extra sorry if anything i write complicates your story]. will us readers ever learn how "star boy" used to live as a star? and i know star boy will fall in love with her but is it out of free will when he does or does he have to cause that's who he's paired with? and does the main girl have any past loves? if so shouldn't she know when she starts to like someone or is it different because now she's in love with a "star-boy".

well that's all i'm going to comment. sorry if this comment was too long!

yaaaaaaaaaaay!
moreee <3

Your school starts early. My classes don't start back up until September eighth.
Yay for the update!

"stars can get paired with trees? And dogs?" -- capitalize the ‘S’ in stars.

"hmmm... I just know. Information travels in space." -- capitalize the H

There was a wardrobe in one cinereous -- cinereous means ‘of an ashy color’ or something, so I don’t really understand this sentence - talking about the guest room she took Estian to

it’s not like she could wish the snow away. -- it’s needs a capital I because that’s the whole sentence

And when you describe her friends, you have Chloe and...I can't remember her name right now, but two of the paragraphs are still touching. You just need to hit "Enter" once between them XD

Great update! Can't wait until you start updating regularly again. I love your stories XD

Love the story XD

The only mistake I found was a typo. Estian is explaining about his heart of fire or whatever =) and you put "ahve" insteat of "have". When he was saying he noticed that he'd never felt it that warm before...
I think he's already in love with her. That's why it's so waarm!!
Of course, I'm a hopeless romantic, soooo...yeah.

<333 the story. Until next AMAZING update!
You have me ADDICTED.
It's AWE-INSPIRING. I'm AWESTRUCK.
How many AWESOME A-words can I describe your ABSOLUTELY wonderful masterpieces with? XD

Oooh, super cool story bro.
:D

i sadly can't read your stories on high school hero for a long time now. my itouch's internet went kaplooey. T.T i hope you still update it here! oh, does blink123zombie have an account here? i want to continue reading her story too.

hehe, she's so confused xD
yaaaay!
More updates ! <3

I was feeling cold from all the soda I drank before reading the update, but reading about how warm that guy is made me feel warm. :3 Teehee! Some more interesting facts learned about the character! 8D Mmm, and now I want soup. XD

I am in love with this story.

baaaahhhh <3
Cute ^.^

Thank you soooo much for the editing help. I have my ipod on auto-correct all the time when I am typing and sometimes I don't even know the odd words that will happen. It also doesn't correct capitalization...it's weird some things change while others don't. Thanks so much for your help! I know typos can get sooo irritating!

Aw, I love this story so far! Very nice idea, stars actually being people; I fell in love with the idea immediately, and it was mostly why I was reading this story. And then I liked it for more than just that reason! 8D You've got some pretty lengthy chapters there, too, and I love that about a story- as long as the chapters keep me hooked like yours did.
I can't wait for more!

Ooooh, another of your stories that I have fallen irrevocably in love with!

In your first chapter, you said something about criticism, so I hope this isn't too much...I was copying them down before I got to the bottom of the chapter. Anything to help ^^

SUMMARY

I’m your star,” - forgot the quotes (“) at the beginning.

Burried - buried
..for Christmas.She -- needs a space

ahve - have
withough - without

forzen - frozen
Treis - tries
Croud - crowd

CHAPTER ONE:

The phone rang loudly and bounced off the wall of the large nearly empty house. --- I would suggest ‘of the large and nearly empty house…’
Celest, an sixteen year old girl… -- Celest, a nearly - A, not AN.

possibility Also -- possibility. Also - needed a period. When she’s talking to her dad on the phone

‘Alright dad. --- “Alright Dad - ‘Dad’ as a name should be capitalized, you didn’t get the quote at the beginning - you just have an apostrophe, and if you want a real nitpicking, ‘all right’ is supposed to be two words, but one word works just fine to me XD

Bourre - is that supposed to be like ‘beret’? the hat? If not, sorry. I just don’t recognize the word and neither does my word processor XD

Merryment - merriment , with an I, not a Y

(now skip quite a ways down) ever ything - everything, just a spacing typo here ^^

Hit chocolate packet - hot chocolate, maybe? =3

somegreat - some great, just need to space it.

CHAPTER TWO:

(actually not big, and in the first paragraph so not hard to find) …, or worse that odd boy --- I would put a comma between worse and that. Like, “or worse, that odd boy.” It just flows better to me.

A little farther down - congrgating - congregating, forgot an e there.

but the hear he brought made the warmth seem freezing --- after star-boy was in her classroom…I don’t understand this sentence --- is it the air he brought???

You have an R in Realized capitalized a little past halfway down, but it shouldn’t be.

her chest was glowing brightlyImAge glanced to her right ---- some weird typo that I can’t even begin to fathom ^^

dAve didn't know why she was asking him questions. --- dave? D’you mean ‘she didn’t know…’??? another strange typo XD

After Celest asks if he can find someone else, you forgot to capitalize her name.

In the few paragraphs right below that, you capitalized She when it doesn’t need to be capitalized, three times (including in the very last sentence).

CHAPTER THREE:

First sentence - don’t should be didn’t

First paragraph -- she glanced up and realized I was --- “I” should be “she” since it’s in third person ^^ just a mistake that anyone can make.

“I can’t believe I’m dong this,” she thought to herself --- “dong” should be “doing”, right?

“Alright then, how did you get here so fast?” Shouldn’t it take you a million years just to get here?” --- take out the middle quotes XD

The man she kicked started curing up a storm - “cursing” up a storm, you mean…?

About in the middle, someone starts talking, “what the…” ---- the W needs capitalized.

That same sentence needs the end quotes (”).

Inviting Estian into her home - “well come in.” she said shivvering from the cold ---- W needs capitalized, and shivering has only one V ^^

(just below) “I’ve never been inside anything before…” --- the ‘I’ isn’t capitalized

“you’ve never been in a house?” --- y needs capitalized

Celest needs capitalized in the next paragraph.

(just a little lower) “I…” ---- needs capitalized, just like above.

(next paragraph) jugement - should be judgment

(where she’s changing into warm clothes) short that had suctioned to her ---- ‘shirt’, I think, because you wouldn’t wear shorts in the snow unless you had a death wish XP

I’m not going to bother listing all of them, but there are more things that start off in the quotes that need capitalized as the beginning of a sentence, for almost the rest of the chapter from probably nine-tenths down the page…

All right, that's all for teh first three chapters. Just thought I'd tell you, but most of them were so minor they didn't really bother me and I only noticed because I was looking. XDDD

Can't wait for more, I'm going to subscribe.
And...could I maybe get a detailed description of Estian and Celest so I can try to draw them, too? ^^ (I'm at a bit of a block on Riel and Hero right now :( lol)

Until next time!!! (sorry for the novella XD)

I love it!
It's a cool concept = )

I love it!!!!! It is really good!!!