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  • EffieXSteffie

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    Oh and I got saved, 'cause I copied it this time!
    :D I won against the internet!
    November 3rd, 2009 at 11:24pm
  • EffieXSteffie

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    F.M.L, I had to write this entire thing again... -__- I knew I should have copied it -__- *cries*

    (Kind of long comment coming you way)

    Okay, I am finally reading (on a second tab) this story :D Because I am absolutely sure, well 80% sure I haven't read from chapter 4 till the eight, which I've noticed is the ending... I will comment on all of them right now. Beginning with of course...

    Chapter 4: That muffin must have been the size of Matt’s hand, and that is huge!
    Don't talk about his hands, talk about his nose... (If I ever get the chance to meet him, I will tease Matt about it and I'ma poke it. Although his nose is not pokable, but Brian's, now he has a pokable nose... I notice noses, how pathetic is that?)

    we heard what sounded like someone throwing up. We broke apart and found Jimmy and Zacky behind us making gagging noises.
    I laughed there...

    “Hello…Hello…oh yeah, I am not here right now, but if you leave me a message, I just might get back to you…who am I kidding, if I don’t know you, then don’t be calling me! But, if I do know you…beware!”
    I love that

    “God, I love that horse cock.”
    My favorite Brian quote! I have it written on my converse and will continue doing so, with all the new ones I buy

    (I wrote more in the other one -_- stupid internet)
    Excellent chapter, Seize the Day has my second favorite Guitar solo, the first goes to Afterlife.

    Chapter 5: Zacky said,
    “she is the one who can not only hang with us, but helps keep us straight”

    Hilarious, had to be Zacky...

    I was frozen in my seat before all the boys jumped out of their seats and hugged me and then Matt planted a huge passionate kiss on my lips before walking up to the stage.
    That had me going "awww"

    Chapter 6: and they all added an extra pop to our “p”.
    I love popping the P

    I dropped to the floor and popped back up thrusting my ass back into his now extremely hard cock, running my hand through the back of my hair. Then turned to face him only to dip back down and mouth the next few lines.
    It's hard for me to imagine her doing that... I just remember of the prequel... and I just... can't.

    Then I shook my ass and proceded to grind up against Matt and I could feel him get, if at all possible, even harder. I also swear I heard him groan.
    Same as above

    “Baby… holy shit. Are you trying to kill me?”
    I laughed out loud :D

    Matt looked at me with his eyes full of lust when I decided to let him see my La Perla panties. I told him that if he was a good boy and got us home, he could see more of that.
    Can't imagine that... where's the innocent Ashlyn?

    Then, I lightly raked my teeth up and down his cock then, he came so hard, but, since I am a nice wife, I drank every last drop of his yummy cum.
    Dude!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! She swallowed...

    lady bits
    Long time without hearing that

    Chapter 7: I am so nervous. I have something very important to tell Matt and I don’t know how I am going to tell him.
    By telling him of course :D

    *make sure Matt is dressed
    Wow... lol nice one :D I love this one.

    I love what Matt got as a present... well, early present. "My dad's tattoos rock"

    Excellent chapters!

    Chapter 8: Matt's Point Of View!
    I like how possessive he is. Val is so lucky, well Ash in this story :D

    “Hark, who goes there?”

    “It is I, the fair Ashlyn, coming to seek my husband, Matthew.”

    “Enter… if you dare!”


    I still love that part!

    “Handsome? I think this is pretty sexy, if I do say so myself.”
    Another great line delivered by Matt! <3

    And, well the rest after she walked into the party, I read through it a bit fast, because, I REALLY can't imagine her like that. O.O' I don't know why.

    Excellent story :D
    November 3rd, 2009 at 11:23pm
  • Just_Nicole

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    So glad there's a sequel :P
    I liked the last two chapters, thanks for reminding me. :L
    October 29th, 2009 at 07:56pm
  • Johnny Christ;

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    this was just what i needed after a weekend like mine was lol
    thanks :)
    October 26th, 2009 at 11:28pm
  • Its_RobynXo

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    cant wait for the sequel
    October 26th, 2009 at 10:49pm
  • Dean Winchester

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    NO EFFIN WAY! OMG!!!!!! SHE ISN'T! OMG! I CANT WAIT FOR MORE! PLEASEEEEEEEEEE UPDATE REALLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLLY SOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON PLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEASE!
    October 26th, 2009 at 01:08pm
  • Johnny Christ;

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    omgggggg
    i want the next chapter to be out now!!!
    she's preggo!!!!!!
    Awww so cute! <3
    October 25th, 2009 at 06:57pm
  • Its_RobynXo

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    I cant wait for his reaction to her being pregnant!
    October 25th, 2009 at 02:46am
  • Dean Winchester

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    HOLY CRAP!!!
    How intense that chapter was! I absoutley loved it babe! It was soooooooooooo freaking hot, steamy, and romantic haha!!! I love it. I just can't wait to see what's going to happen with all the intense stuff in their relationship...

    MORE PLEASE XOXO!
    October 21st, 2009 at 06:05pm
  • A7xlover2012

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    I love it lots!!!!
    October 21st, 2009 at 01:34pm
  • Just_Nicole

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    Great Updates. :)
    October 19th, 2009 at 07:20pm
  • Johnny Christ;

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    that scene was hot and heavy! Omg, that was great!
    October 16th, 2009 at 07:07pm
  • Its_RobynXo

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    great update
    October 16th, 2009 at 06:01am
  • Quiescent.

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    Yaya, you're getting better! *claps*

    Keep it up, Hun!
    October 7th, 2009 at 11:30pm
  • Johnny Christ;

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    awww cute chapter! loved the tats and that quote is one of my favs!!

    more soon?
    October 7th, 2009 at 09:29pm
  • Its_RobynXo

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    another cute chapter, loved it!
    October 7th, 2009 at 06:37pm
  • FinchellLovesA7X

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    Love it hahahahahahahaha “one cool bitch who doesn’t take no for an answer”. Jonny is Hilariuos
    October 7th, 2009 at 04:52am
  • Dean Winchester

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    I loved it! :D! Sooo good! Update soon babe!
    October 5th, 2009 at 04:48pm
  • FinchellLovesA7X

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    Love it hahahahahahahahahaha poor bella
    October 3rd, 2009 at 06:21pm
  • Johnny Christ;

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    awwww this chapter was cuuutteee!!!

    I love the outfits btw!
    October 3rd, 2009 at 06:10pm