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  • DontGet_It_InMyEye

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    horsie890:
    You tend to mix up first person and third person sometimes when you're writing in first person point of view. You might want to smooth that out a little.

    I started reading this story before I realized it's a sequel. X_X I like it for what it is, though. It's not that difficult to figure stuff out. I think it's interesting, to say the least.

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    Yeah I did that tooooo
    March 29th, 2008 at 02:27am
  • xxkimmi

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    loved it! Smile
    February 20th, 2008 at 12:49pm
  • Every..Single..Beat

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    love it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    can't wait for more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!plz more!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!hi!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!lol!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
    February 17th, 2008 at 08:11pm
  • AlternativeAdele

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    lol, her bandmates will pay :)
    February 9th, 2008 at 02:36pm
  • sketch.

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    Nice update.

    Want more :]
    February 9th, 2008 at 01:12am
  • Michaela Wayne

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    Eee. I've been waiting for this update.
    Very good. I liked it.
    February 8th, 2008 at 10:03pm
  • Kupo

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    Shaant is such a mother fucker~!
    January 13th, 2008 at 08:09pm
  • Stef.

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    i didn't realise it was a sequel until the third chapter. but i went back and read the prequel first!

    and i'm liking, despite the pov thing which you've explained. :] i've subscribed, so continue with it please. :]
    December 21st, 2007 at 08:20pm
  • stay gone;

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    :O DONT KILL OFF HAYLEY

    please? No
    December 19th, 2007 at 07:19am
  • x...HelpMe...x

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    nice chapter.

    sorry it took so long to read it. i've been that busy.

    anyway that was great.

    Bella
    xx
    December 17th, 2007 at 09:49am
  • Michaela Wayne

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    I really liked it. Clever plot. *subscribed*
    December 15th, 2007 at 01:41am
  • sketch.

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    aww
    poor Hayley!!!
    Grr... josh and Pete go kill Shaant. Yeh!

    DONT KILL HAYLEY
    THE GOBLINS WILL GET YOU
    December 14th, 2007 at 02:19am
  • Undead-Monkey

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    I loove it! UPDATE SOON!
    It's sooo good!
    December 12th, 2007 at 11:58am
  • AlternativeAdele

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    I really like the update :) keep it coming please... Poor gal, Shaant is a dick!
    December 12th, 2007 at 07:39am
  • Undead-Monkey

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    its amazing. it really is, please please update!
    October 22nd, 2007 at 05:33am
  • Juliet; love

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    Yeah I know. That's the worst part of my writing is that I can't figure the fuck out when I slip into third. And when I keep it in third, I write it all in first without realizing it. My brain doesn't know what the fuck it wants.

    And yeah. It's predictable cause I'm still planning it all out so it fits together There should be some surprises soon though...hopefully
    October 16th, 2007 at 12:54am
  • horsie890

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    You tend to mix up first person and third person sometimes when you're writing in first person point of view. You might want to smooth that out a little.

    I started reading this story before I realized it's a sequel. X_X I like it for what it is, though. It's not that difficult to figure stuff out. I think it's interesting, to say the least.

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    October 15th, 2007 at 12:34pm
  • sketch.

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    ooh, this is great!
    please write more!
    October 13th, 2007 at 02:50am
  • x...HelpMe...x

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    i loved that.....BIT LATE PETE!
    hehe
    October 11th, 2007 at 05:34pm
  • ManoftheYear

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    the comment thing sed to not to post unless it was something important...and it is::

    I LOVE THE LAYOUT IT IS SEXEH AND YES, THE GUYS OF FOB ARE "FLY LIKE THAT."

    that is all.
    October 10th, 2007 at 05:22am
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