Through Broken Glass - Comments

Wow.
You're such a good writer.
I suck SO MUCH comepared to you.
TEACH ME! (:

But, anyways, yeah...this was pretty amazing.
And I'm sure that Ben you love to know that you wrote such an amazing story for him.

Yeah, I liked this Eggeh. You're a good writer.

The fact that's it's a true story makes it more interesting, and it gets you into the story more, and makes you want to read more. You described the scene perfectly and you put words into more than just one sentence, you stretched it out. That was nice.

The descripition at the beginning was so good. I enjoyed. But seriously, Rest in peace, Ben.

It was sad. Rest in peace, Ben.

However, I did like the fact that it was based off real events and well written...I liked the way you described it. I agree with the person above me; most people would have put simple descriptions in the story (including me, I guess, sometimes) but you didn't. Kudos to you on that.

Your story is some really dramatic stuff. Good job, good job.

I liked how it was based off something real. I don’t find many stories on here like that. In my opinion, I think it’s harder to write a story based off real events. I just think putting everything into words and trying not to forget something is hard. But you did a very good job. The words you chose to describe things were good choices. It made the story flow at ease.

I also liked how the first couple of paragraphs were describing the way he was riding the bike at such. I think most writers would’ve just said “He was breathing really hard as he rode his bike.”
You stretched that little sentence into paragraphs and made it beautiful.

A lot of times when I’m reviewing a story I’ll say it was good. I never lie – they are good when I say it. But most of the time I don’t personally enjoy it, I think about if other people would like it, too.
But this time I actually enjoyed this one. I didn’t read the summary because sometimes I feel like the spoils the story.
Even though it was sad, it was really good. You did a great job.

Wow. Powerful stuff, well written.
Sad, but very good.