Ghost of You - Comments

hmm weird....

Oooo this is getting intense :o

Mwahaha! I knew it

WHAT?!?!?!?! o.o Gordon is dead?!?!
AND BILLI'S ON LOCKDOWN?!?! DAMN YOU THANATOS!!!!!! D:<

Aw he was probably seeing things :( Or is Gordon dead and he's seeing his ghost? :O

Amazing! ^-^ Poor Tomi :( But there is a possibility that he was just seeing things :/

Damn....he's back. :P

AHHHH! Oh no

I like how some information has been given about phantomriders and humanoids. You better update again soon!

UGH WHY IS IT SO SHORT?!?!?! D:<
But i love how you mixed Phantomrider and Humanoid in it ^-^ That was awesome <3

Loved the update :) Very mysterious

Okay this story is fantastic!!!! PLEASE update soon! I'm completely hooked!! Amazing job, you're awesome :)

GRRR!! WTF?!! MAKE IT LONGER!!!!! D'x Please please next chapter has to be so long that my eyes fall out!! Okay!?!?! :P

Omg this is a amazing! All it took was the 1st chapter to get me hooked! Here's what I love it gives me detail I can read it and almost see what the character is seeing them self yet also I love how it makes you almost wonder what if?

I'm confused... Lol I'm too slow to read this kind of story ;p
It's good though.. I'm just confused as all hell. :(

I DON'T FORGIVE YOU!!!!
lol jk jk ^-^
Come on though...like seriously...just an inch longer!! Lol
That chapter did not satisfy my craving what-so-ever :'(
UPDATE SOON!!! :D
And i mean,soon.....

(I only read the first paragraph, because of how long this story is. I just wouldn't have to time to get through it.)
In the summary, the only errors I saw were where you put commas at the end of the sentences instead of periods. I do think, though, that it is a bit long for a summary. I don't know how to explain, I would just suggest shortening it so that it grabs the reader's attention, without giving too much information away.
The first chapter was interesting, very cool idea. It was very detailed, which I enjoy about a story.
Other than the few in the summary, I didn't see any grammar and or spelling errors in the first paragraph.
Good job, seriously(:

(I just want to say that I laughed when I saw how many chapters you had; the same amount I said I wouldn't read xD ahahah <3 Anyway!!)

I like the banner image, and how it blends into the page, and the background is very cool looking. It reminds me of snakes, for some strange reason :O As for the summary, I think it could almost stand alone with the top part. It was well-written and not too long, which was nice :) I was also thankful that I know who Tom and Bill Kaulitz are xD

Onto the Prologue:

That was so sad :( I feel bad for Tom, seeing as it was his idea to go to the lake and then down the path close to the water. And, I feel bad for Bill because he drowned D:Though, I couldn't help but wonder, why did he stop flailing so quicky? I didn't think he was in the water that long, but I could be wrong. Or maybe there's something I don't know :O

The descriptions were very nicely done, and there were virtually no mistakes that I could find :D I'm really curious to see how you plan to write this, so I'll probably come back to this and read the rest of it :D

Good luck <3

Whoa Whoa Whoa.
This is intrestingly good. I couldn't stop reading but since I have to go, I stoped with 4 chapters left to read, i will finish though. Very good description and each chapters concept, i love this story very much the uniqueness and the intrestingness. <3

OMG!!! You totally need to update this. I want to finish it. It is an amazing story, and you are an amazing writer. I can't wait for the rest!!