Ghost of You - Comments

It's about time!!!!!!!! lol

But i'm totally confused XD

I love the way you describe things so well I could imagine bill lying above the water just floating and at that part made me cry slightly.
I love your layout and the colors go well with the banner.
The first chapter was well descriptied and written your a very good writer
I will keep reading I promise. :)

Oh wow, the ending of your prologue was so raw and saddening. Your writing style is very good. I like your descriptions, I could see what was happening that night in the pouring rain through your words. I couldn't imagine watching someone close to me die right before my eyes. I'm curious as to where this goes so I must catch up on your chapters!

Okay, this comment isn't going to do this story any kind of justice, but I had to tell you how amazing this is.<33 It's like four o'clock here, and I just....I can't stop reading. I just finished up chapter ten and holy cow my mind is boggled. Well, more like blown. I honeslty, honestly love this story. I don't know who the people really are, but with your writing be all amazing like this, I don't really care, haha. I'm falling in love with characters I barely know, all because you're an amazing writer.<33 With all your detail....you can really tell you put a lot of effort into this. This is amazing, fabulous, perfect, and I'm so sorry it took me so long to get to this. Really, I think I should be locked up because procrastinating on reading a story this amazing should be a crime, gigglys.<33

Truly amazing job.<33

I'll be back to read the rest as soon as I get some sleep. :) <3

Oh! His brother cracked his head under the water, okay. Now I understand.

Only question I have is: Why didn't he jump in the water to save his brother?
He had a flashlight!
Just a small thought.

I know I tend to focus on description alot in my comments, but it's one of my favorite things to focus on. And right away, we have this:
"The thunder clapped loudly above in the sky, the lightning blazing across the inky darkness. The rain poured heavily down, cracking on tree limbs and nearly shattering the ground. The wind blew like a kid blowing out birthday candles, ripping the tree limbs back, then sending them forward again with a hard blow from the opposite direction.
A marvelous picture is painted in my head through description at the very beginning.
And the description carries on through the entire story. It's enough to give distinct pictures, but not too much.

This passage from chapter three was filled with so much emotion:
"I gasped for air, my insides feeling hallow. I dropped onto my knees in front of his tombstone, tracing my fingers over the word “twin.”"

I really like this and your writing style.

I'm subscribing! =)

I'm sorry but I really do not like the layout :/
It seems a little ... TOO dark for me, you know?
I say lighten it up a bit, but still give that edgy feel :)
the storm was really well explained for sure,
(that's coming from a girl who hates storm too!)
that's cool they have their own secret lake :)
but I'm getting a weird feeling, i feel something bad will happen to them
plus, storms always have those eerie, dangerous feelings too
I'm thinking that these guys are siblings, but I'm not 100%
oh jeez, talk about a huge cliffhanger and a huge scare!
definitely a good first chapter, to tell the hard truth
the only thing I'd change is the layout, and that is all :)

I only read the prologue for now because I have a couple other stories I have to read as well, but I love this so much I'm going to subscribe so I can read the other chapters later! The was you described everything was perfect, I got so into it! Can't wait to read the rest!

Ooooooooo....who's Tom gonna believe now? Lol =D Great chapter!

I read them last night, didn't get a chance to comment.
I loved it. Sarah is like the best character ever and her mother really needs to chill.
So the kid can see stuff, stop making her feel like she doesn't really know somewhat of what's going on.
And Tom, understandable why he's lying, but whatever.

Last chapter, confusing, but I'm guessing we'll find out everything eventually, but as always, loved it as well. Like I've said before, your writing blows me away. :)

....I don't care, i still don't like Carine xP

Liked the update but it was too damn short! D':
Can't wait for the next update ^_^

....I don't care, i still don't like Carine xP

Liked the update but it was too damn short! D':
Can't wait for the next update ^_^

I FINALLY READ IT!!! XD now will you please stop yelling at me in school? Lol. Very good, i love how the story is moving along. (And i noticed one small typo, the very end of the last chapter you put up reads "card" when you meant to say "car") ;P

Interesting :)

Hope Mein Mann is in the next chapter x-]

Bill! You must reunite with your brother, but bringing him into scary dreams is not the way! Or maybe it is....

HEY!!!!! YOU PROMISED ME BILL!!! D:

This is a good chapter though...*under breath* it'd better if Bill were in it.... xD

I loved it!
Crimson seems cool :D
I don't like the carny guy D;

oooohhh... me likey. XD seems like those two have something in common

ok so i just wanna say that u are an awesome writer i love this story and plz update more <3<3