Emotionless - Comments

i love this so you must keep writing!!!!!!!!!!!!

I love it! It's a really amazing start, and I'd love to read more.
funny thing is, I'm Mr. Hall, as well. XD That's my last name!! YAAAAAAAAY!!!

wow, you need to update this.
...unless it's finished. in which case you should, you know, clarify it. or maybe it's undecidedly unfinished... i don't know. i guess it doesn't really matter all that much.

I am naught but another pawn in the game, and pawns don't feel; they just do.
i love that sentence. it's a perfect way to describe your...not-feelings without over-using the term "numb".

this is gonna sound weird, but your writing style reminds me of that by Lewis Caroll. ever heard of him? the writer of Alice in Wonderland? he's very talented, as are you :]

i can totally relate to what happened in the second chapter. sometimes my friends say horrible things about innocent people, too, and i always rant about it. but i've never said to any of them "i hate you". twas a little rash, but it had good meaning. you stood up for what you believed in! (if this actually happened. i'm not sure)

i'm surprised no one's commented on this yet. it's very good :]
you should update it soon, if you plan to.