BOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOON. OH MY GOD Crymson sounds so sincere, I feel so bad that Poppy can't see that she's changed!): Please don't have her go through too much of a hell... ANYWAY. Please update soon! :D I can't wait for that "She's the Man" scene! c;
Wow. I'm psychic. I was thinking about this story yesterday wondering... what happened to it??? I'm so happy to see it again! You're probably a better writer too! No offense, but I mean it's been like a year lol. When I wrote my first story, the first chapters were poop but the ending chapters were kind of amazing, so I'm curious to see how you've grown. I haven't been on Mibba for quite a while now, but this story is hopefully worth it! I really hope you finish it this time!!!
my gosh ~ i read the "original" on quizilla, was up to date with it last time, and now you're revamping ? I STILL HAVEN'T FORGOTTEN THIS THOUGH ! Surprisingly, i actually i think i still remember everything/most things @_@
It's been too long though, and usually it's saddening when writers redo their stories, but i'm actually looking forward to the come back of this so yay :D Hope you can develop your writing better and write the story to your satisfaction this time :D
:) Accidentally stumbled upon this. It was at the top of the stories page. I never read the original story, sorry, I just never got into it. But this immediatly captured my attention. I've moved several times in my life (as I've told you) so I can relate to the character and I've lived in San Fran and currently live in L.A, though i've never been to alaska. :P I thought it was hilarious though that you thought 82,000 was small. I lived in this TINY town in New Mexico (in the us) called Hobbs with like 8000-1000 people. Everyone knew everyone and mostly everyone was a gang member, drug dealer, stripper, or something of the like. Bad town. Anyway.
I liked this story. It was cute, realistic, and interesting all at once. It seems like it could be a real paperback novel. :P I subscribed, can't wait for more and I hope you stay inspired!
Please don't leave this story discontinued just like that! I just started reading this, and boy have I fallen hard for this story. Love's got a lot of different definitions, and I'm adding this to my long list!(-: please update or something, this story already means a whole lot to me.
First of all, I like the layout, and the banner is lovely. The blue wood is pretty, too.
I spotted a few things in the summary:
Crymson Venus: She said she's change. Some people think she was still that snobby daddy's little girl but then again some people agree that she has changed for the good. Ever since the sixth grade Crymson's wealthy-ness has gotten to her head and has turned a sweet angelic little girl into a snob.
First of all, wouldn't it be "she said she'd change" or "she said she's changed?" And there is supposed to be a comma after girl, before but, in the second sentence. And instead of wealthy-ness (unless you're trying to be funny in some sort of way, then by all means, keep it!), wealth sounds a bit better.
She was some-what relieved that they were.
Somewhat is one word. :D
In the first chapter,
Seventeen.” He answered simply.
He isn't capitalized, and the period should be a comma. :D
“Uh…” He began
Same here.
Other than that, I didn't really see many more mistakes, so I'll leave it at that. Anyway, I really like this idea. It's a moving thing, which can be cliche, but you've made it your own, with twists. The chapters are kind of funny, and they flow nicely, too. :) I think this is lovely. I'll subscribe, even if it's finished already. :D <3
The second chapter is awesome and well done.
I can see improvement and maturity you gained as an author.
I can't wait for more!