Hello. I like this stoy a lot. It has a great storyline/plot to it. I just think that you should make he chapeers flow more. They are kinda choppy and every chapter something new and drastic happens. I'd try to make it more like sections of her life for every like 5 to ten chapters. And just check to spelling. Oherwise... I <3 it!!!
December 17th, 2009 at 10:19pm
