Loving the characters and how you use their personalities to develop and propel the plot. Great job on this chapter, and I hope the next one comes out soon.
Ok so I've subscribed to this story since the beginning and I dont know if I have commented on it before, And I am sorry I havent, But this is becoming one of my all time favorite stories. I love it and I can't wait for you to update again!
So, I have to love Gwen since she's so protective of Frankie and plans a way for Frankie to make Jordan jealous by getting her a hot date with Marc. Marc has to know that something is up if he's Frankie's date when she's Jordan's "girlfriend" and Jordan has some other girl as a date. I love that Max is willing to go along with Gwen's plan and compliment Frankie to get on Jordan's nerves. He deserves to be agitated after reverting back to his party/ playboy ways and not even trying to talk to Frankie. Marc clearly knows that Frankie's special and I like that he's able to tell that she was uncomfortable with the girl hanging off Jordan. Marc's perfect forget Jordan...okay, maybe not forget him but, he's still a jerk that needs to fix things himself after screwing up. Loved the update.
"So, Frankie, where have you been hiding those legs? You look gorgeous," Max squealed as he eyed Francesca shamelessly. He smirked a shit eating smirk at Jordan, knowing what Gwen was planning, bringing his brother into the picture and he wanted nothing more than to be a part of it. I love that boy. He makes me smile. :)
Loved that chapter. I love everything about it. :) It made me happy. :) I'm so glad you updated it. :) Love it. :) :) :) :D :D :D :P :P :P
Awwww, poor Jordan!!!!!!! He had to leave and then he wouldn't have seen her push him away!!!!! :( Sadness. :( Love it though, and I can't wait for the next update!!!!!! :) :) :) :D :D :D :P :P :P
And can this one count towards Careless since I'm mentioning it??? Haha :) Love it :) :) :) :D :D :D :P :P:P
Why does Ryan think the best way to get her to stop talking is by making out with her? I would think a simple, "so, how's the weather?" segue would have worked too. Jordan really does have bad timing for things but, it's also somewhat lame that he doesn't even bother to approach her, he drove all the way out there for nothing. I think it's cute though that the only person Frankie could talk about was Jordan though. Now, Gwen just needs to shove them in a closet so they can make up...and out whichever comes first. Loved the update, Ryan a little too late there.
aw why does he have to walk in the wrong moment?! ohohoh, does it count if i just keep writing comments over and over until you get 10 new comments? so that an update would come? haha, im such a cheater! LOL. c'mon people! comment! i love this chapter more than the rest! i hope you keep it up! =)
Frankie and Jordan are both immature. Which, makes a whole whack of sense. Frankie has never been in a relationship or looked up from her books long enough to observe the relationships going on around her. Jordan has never been in a relationship that lasted longer than him in bed. However, you have insightful characters to help them along (Gwen, her mom (always the mom >.>)). Now, how you'll make Frankie and Jordan click in a fresh, romantic, and passionate way with a level of maturity and insight that seems beyond the ages, is a mystery. But yeah. That's what i'm looking for from your writing. Something fresh and new that only you can think up.