Forever Is Fine - Comments

I like the idea of this, it's interesting and new.

The summary confused me a little though, but other than that it's great so far! ^_^

Keep it up

This story is great! I love the way the chapters alternate between Destery and Tanner. And I love to see the love that Tanner has for his baby sister, even though I feel bad for him because of his mother. Destery's mom is just awesome!

Can't wait to see what is going to happen next!

I still love the way you write Tanner because his thoughts are just so believable. He carries the entire story in my eyes.

So I just kind of stumbled across this story recently and I must say; it's amazing!
I love the idea of the story! It's quite adorable actually.
I have to say I really wish Destery and Kyle get together later in the story or maybe Tanner and Destery meeting. Just saying! :]
Update soon?

Great chapter! ^.^ I'm gonna guess that the message was for Walker, eh? xD I wonder what she wrote... hmmm. But anyways, I'm excited for the next chapter!

I love the way this is written. And it just the perfect amount of detail. You put enough to set the mood, but you didn't overdo it.
And I love the name Tanner. It's different and unique and I just adore it.
That last line was edgy too. Her hands shook as she opened the letter and begun to read.
It's a good and simple cliff hanger. Makes me want more. I'm subscribing to this

YES!!! You updated! *dances a jig* xD Now, next chapter I'll get to hopefully see more of the Walker dude! Haha!

OMGoodness!!! Kat and Tanner is a very adorable couple ^_^ and she is so good Bentley :) I can't wait until you update again :D

The summary made me really confused. I've clicked on this before but clicked back because of the confusing summary, but I was reading my past journals and found that this was whored when I asked for stories, so here I am again. xD
I love the layout, by the way.
Destery had met Kyle back in the eighth grade; he was tall and lanky but very smart, his hair was cut short then and his face was round with acne; Destery didn’t care because…well...she looked the same. One thing they had in common was that they both loved to read. - not sure why, but I really like this part :)
Hm...I actually thought the thing about William could have been eased into the story in a smoother way, but maybe I'll change my mind once I read the other chapters. Des's workaholicness is making me feel guilty about my own neglected work. :)) So I'll read the rest, err, tomorrow maybe. I am pretty interested with what'll happen. :)

I looooove this story :o Poor Kyle! He's one of my favorites D:

KYLE WAS IN AN ACCIDENT!!!!
That's bad, although as I was silently screaming "Noooo!" I couldn't help but chuckle at Destrey when she said "Fudger-monkey!"
I can't wait to see what yall have in store for Walker :)
-Kaylers!

Ohhh...a new character :)

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First off, love the background. Very cute.

Just from reading the thin summary I can tell it's an interesting plot. And something that would definitely be considered cute. I can see it becoming very popular if you guys keep whoring it around the site. :]

Stories like this, romance-y stuff, are very common but it's lovely once you get a decent plot line to go with it so that it's not...too gushy. If you get what I'm saying at all. Enough that you're not like seriously?

Um, I also enjoy your writing style quite a bit. You've got the technique of a Young Adult writer, which is good because you're obviously an intelligent writer. You use great vocabulary and grammar, so I'm not like, oh god I can't handle this. Which I have been like before while reading a published young adult novel. It was awful. I wanted to cry.

I'm fairly excited to read the rest of this, and I think I'll be keeping up with you from now on. I haven't had much time to read much of yours but I have to say it is quite enjoyable. :] Keep it up, girlie.

that was a great chapter!! :) update soon

that was a great chapter!! :) update soon

Goodness, has the Mibba E-mail updates failed me. It's been so long that I re-read the previous chapters because I got lost from being uninformed. But alas, I still love this story and the way you write it. :)

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Layout:

I love it. It really goes well with that the story seems to be about thus far. I really like the picture you chose, also.

Summary:

I love the summary. At first I didn’t understand, but when I looked at it after I read the second chapter, it gave so much away without saying anything at all. It makes me want to read it all!

Chapter 2:

Tanner had gotten home from school at three thirty to find his mother laying in that same position on her bed, Bentley crying murderously from her crib.

Instead of laying, I think it should be lying.

I love what you have come up with. Even though I didn’t read the first chapter, I felt that through your description in chapter two, I knew exactly what was going on. I love going into stories like that. It makes me want to read it more, and you truly did that.

It seems like it is getting off to a good start, and the characters seem to be developing at a good rate as well.

Overall:

I simply adored every aspect of this. Only on thing slightly threw me off in the grammatical aspect, and even then it was not anything I would stop reading a story over. I love it.

You just got yourself a new subscriber.

I think Kyle's modest at Destrey seeing him without a shirt on and his protective friend behavior is cute! :D

I kind of feel pity for Tanner because he has had to grow up at a younger age whereas most people don't grow to that maturity until an older age.

Oh! I like the little symbol that seperates one scene to another! ^.^

Is this line intended as it is written or was it accidently mistyped?
Tanner's hands froze over his book and his travelled to Kat's expecting face.

Well, you two are amazing writers...keep up the good work!!!

im happy that he's got 'Kat' to be his friend! :) keep goin, cant wait for more!!!

Your story is pretty amazing :) update soon!

Well the summary befuddled me so maybe clear that up? Umm...other than that, I like where the story is heading and the story has a lot of detail which most stories lack and it's not like you have too much detail either. I think I'm going to subscribe :D great job!