Forever Is Fine - Comments

So how old is Destery again? I like the name, it really is original. And I like the plot. Keep going! Keep going! =)

Why didn't I hear of this before??

This is amazing. I love how both of you write. Great writerds, the both of you. :D
update soon?

This is pretty good. I love the banner!

I liked the update, the whole of it really keeps readers interested in the story. Good job and keep up the good work.

This is very interesting. The characters are believable as well as likeable.

It's an easy read and a good one at that.

Good job.

Doctor

I really like the way you're going with the plot here. I especially love the way you can add an emotional magic to something as simple as an English assignment, and the way this can get your characters thinking. That shows a real depth of character development. The letters themselves are also eloquent.

I have to say, when you have a lot of short sentences and letters especially, centering your text can make things difficult to read, especially if you have eyesight like mine. However, this is criticism that cuts more to the format than the substance of your writing.

Keep going!

-Aelf.

This was really good. ;D

Another lovely chapter. Please continue soon.

That was... Wonderful!
Thank you for curing my boredom

I like the whole plot and it sounds like it is off to a great start.

Darn cliff-hangers. Fun for the author, not fun for us.
Guess that means I'll just have to be checking back.
And the fact that it's a great beginning, your detail and description make it marvellous, is a factor in that too.
(:

This definitely drew my attention from the summary, it just seemed to draw me in somehow.
I thought it was well written and it seems sad that Destery is such a workaholic, even when her friends want to have fun. I did like the story, and the quote 'curiosity killed the cat' seems like it may work out for this one. I would love to see how you get on with this one :D

It's alright. There are far too many semicolons and many of the sentences need to be split into two separate ones. The mystery of the letter ending up in Destery's mail-box is fine, but her just accepting it and opening it when it's not addressed to her - addressed to a dead friend, no less - is strange and feels out of place. I look forward to seeing what will come of the cliffhanger you left your audience with.

This is pretty interesting so far.
I like how Destiny is like one of those girls that always study, like even when school is closed.
(Like Hermione for Harry Potter XD)
And this is well written, and good description.

I like how this is written, not exactly catching my eye that much but it is only the first chapter, keep it up.

Well, first chapter is short but I think the plot ought to be intriguing. I like the way you've managed to introduce several characters with about the right amount of depth. I agree that it could use some editing just for flow, but that said, there is nothing wrong with your substance.

The character's name is also very unusual- was it picked because it has a particular meaning, or just because of the sound?

great story, and an original idea. i think this was a really good intro that left me hanging at the end because I wanted to see what the letter said (cliffhanger sort of!) ;)
and i hope you update soon!

Once again your writing is amazing and i enjoyed it a lot. The beginning paragraphs were a little confusing. Maybe you should try and clear it up some, but i liked it and i managed to understand it and I'm SLOW lol so it's obviously no big deal. I love the layout and the title and overall it's amazing. Like all of your work i have read. Bravo.

You don't normally see stories this creative on here. I barely find stories that interest me, but this drew me in right from the start. I absolutely love it.

I got a little confused at the ending, but that's okay. :)

I like this story. A lot.

I don't quite get why a letter to William is in her mailbox and, better yet, why on earth she would be reading it. But.. whatever. :]