Violet - Comments

This is amazing. The sequel doesn't follow the first story quite from the start, and it does have its own story. I think you're doing a wonderful job of it, so far.

I think the one best line you have written would have to be: "The only sound was that of the snow, tap-dancing on the skylights like happy fools."

It just makes me think she's such a quiet person that can sneak up behind someone and tap you on the shoulder before you realize someone was even there.

I did find one error whilst reading through this, but it's nothing major: "- and thought. She hadn’t gone to school in four days, since her winter break had begun."

After the '- and thought' you should have a colon (:) after it, and then continue with the following sentence.

Everything else is fine though, it was just that tiny mistake. I am absolutely loving your story. If you keep writig like this; I will have my spine crawling with fear.

It's coming along pretty well. Very wicked. You've got a lot of good ideas and i can't wait to see what comes next. Pretty freaky. Definite spook factor. This story is gonna be great.

Soooo creepy! I love it, I love it :)

Holy crap! The finger being the key...it was creepy o.o I wonder what happens next. I bet nothing good ;)

This story is really unusual.

But I like it :) I haven't read anything like it before on Mibba and its really well written.

Well done!

I really like the story xD I wonder what happens next. I didn't expect that she would hear a voice in her head. Actually I rather expected her to meet some insane person at first. Can't wait for more :) Keep it up!