Shattered Secrets and Asphyxiated Stars - Comments

This was amazing, I love it :)

I like the editing better than what you had before...is it still headed in the same direction?
~Cici

wooah this is really good!! you defnitely improved it a lot!!!

Ouch, what a way to end the second chapter.

I enjoyed reading this story, it's very natural and calm in the retelling of things. Hailey seems like the type of character I'd sympathize for, it's sad about some of the things that happened to her.

Your writing style is great. You manage to put in details without making this obvious, I like that, it makes you look back on some things later on in the story.

Keep writing, I hope you update soon enough, don't let the talent go to waste :)

Maralie

You are a very talented writer. Thats all I have to say. Flawless. Keep it up :)

This seems very interesting.
I was pulled in by the summary; I hadn't even read the first chapter yet. Keep going and update soon. :D