June 27th, 2014 at 11:57pm
Gorgeous layout and picture at the top. So easy to read, too.
Summary is just awesome - it really pulls you in, even though it's so short and simple. It's great!
The prologue was really nice. I really got a good feel for what her life was like, and how horrible and unfair it is for that to be taken away from a child. It really seems like a good set-up to a unique story.
Didn't spot any grammar mistakes or spelling errors or anything like that, and your writing style is very good, in my opinion. Good job on that :)
But I've never read anything like this before, I've read about princesses and such but the way the wrote it was so... blah, the way this was worded is damned good.
You do make subtle sexy.
Jack's a little weird, but, weird is good. Really wish you would've kept up with this story.
The layout is simple but pretty, I'm not that big on over the top layouts. Kudos