i think his loyalty to her is realistic, I mean he was in love with her. But at the same time he imprinted on Clara, so his devotion should be to her. I like the way you write, everything is conflicting, just like it is in reality. keep it, and update soon please :)
What did she mean by this? "I was too stoned to hold up my walls" Because stoned is when you're totally wasted on like illegal, controlled substances. She's in a hospital right? Then I am confused, because if she's in a hospital she can't be like stoned. Confused?