Hey now say what? She's preggo? She need to tell Ben soon before it causes more complications. Adam needs to take her back to Chicago asap and Michael needs to get outta the picture I have a bad feeling about him but it chould just be me being paranoid. I didn't like it I LOVED it! More soon please! =]
Sooooo, words cannot begin to describe how excited I am about this story. At first, my heart skipped a beat when I got the email notification. I wanted to jump up and down and scream my lungs out! I was so happy! More Ben and Evelyn! MIBBA'S WONDER COUPLE! <3
The first word that came to mind about this chapter was "bittersweet." It's nice to see Evelyn settling in. Although I know how stupid she is for leaving Ben, she IS the heroine of this story and if she's not happy, I'm not happy. I really love the way you worked those pregnancy signs in there and made the final line (which is a total cliffhanger - DAAAAAAAMN YOOOOOU) reveal it all. Adam. Oh, Adam. The thought of his face at her belly just makes me LOL.
Another thing I really enjoy reading is when an author isn't so clear about certain details until later. Like the Michael phone call, I got the sense that it was sameoldsameold Michael trying to call her up and say, "Wanna go out on a date?" (Homeboy just can't WIN with Lyn, can he?) Little did I know that they were LIVING together. I don't want to see her with Michael, but it is nice that she at least has a friend. I was wondering why he wasn't the "I'm gonna hit on you" type of Michael anymore and it all makes sense, BECAUSE SHE'S ALREADY BEN EAGER'S BABY MAMMA! And he should be her coming-out-of-the-closet gay best friend so things aren't awkward. But then he might hit on Ben, which would be SO LAME of him. Wowwwwwww... sorry.
I just hope that she actually TELLS Ben instead of him finding out on his own, then jumping to conclusions that it was Michael's baby and not his. But that's just waaaaaaay too many drama llamas on the farm, eh? Anyway, I really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, really, reallly, REEEEEEEEEAAAAALLLLLLLLYYYYYYYY loved this chapter. I'm so excited for this story!!
okay. i knew it! i just did. she's preggo and i knew it was coming! so anyway that was splendid! and i would like to add that i don't like michael too much, i dunno why though, hes kinda fishhy. So i really want her to see Ben, although im sensing a really awkward reunion between those two, that or they run into each others arms in slow-motion . Ugh i just like a happy ending okay?shoot me. Oh and that banner of yours? to.die.for. his eyes are electric. So update soon deary :)
Holy bad word! Preggers?! Oh gosh! And I love Adam so far he just makes me smile. Wow you really need to keep writing! I'm already hooked and it's only the first chapter!!