October 25th, 2007 at 08:24am
This is beautifully described, although grammar may need some work.
I could imagine these characters so wonderfully, I miss them already.
You are a really good writer for your age, so I'm excited about this.
The whole part you put in about how messed up the world is, how they can go about declairing wars, and spending every penny they own on it, and then not offer so much as a dime to those who need it, was really heavy on me, because it just goes to how how the wotld is /very/ cold in times, and rarely makes sense.
Ugh, I'm going to write now, because you've insired me more than you could know. So I bid you thanks.